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To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v.1

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v. 1
Learning mathematics in school is becoming a controversial topic with the parents. While some parents think that mathematics is irrelevant subject, while others think it is very important to study it. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments. There are a growing number of parents who think that mathematics in school is not relevant to their kid and it should be removed from the curriculum. They have a reason to believe this because they think that most of the maths is done by computers so learning this is just a waste of their kids' time. Nowadays, every calculation, equation and most of the mathematical problems are solved without any human intervention. Due to this, most of the parents believe that courses like maths should be skipped. In contrast, other parents think that maths is a very important part in the education system and they want their children to learn it. They think that the subjects like maths helps will help their young ones in many ways to solve the real life problems. Maths would help their kids develop a good sense of understanding about numbers. After all, mathematics provides students with a far different perspective about the world. For example, maths can help you ease lots of daily activities which involve numbers such as bills, taxes, etc. For these reasons many parents support maths as a subject and wants it to be taught. Should maths be included? Some parents think its outdated and redundant while the other half still believes it as an important topic. This issue discussed why parents want their kids to learn maths and why some parents think it as an irrelevant topic to be studied.
Learning
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mathematics
in school is becoming a controversial topic with the
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parents
. While
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some
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parents
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think
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mathematics
is irrelevant subject, while others
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think
it is
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very
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important
to study it. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments.

There are a growing number of
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parents
who
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think
that
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mathematics
in school is not relevant to their kid and it should
be removed
from the curriculum. They have a reason to believe this
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because
they
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think
that most of the
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maths
is done
by computers
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so
learning this is
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just
a waste of their kids' time. Nowadays, every calculation, equation and most of the mathematical problems
are solved
without any human intervention. Due to this, most of the
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parents
believe that courses like
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maths
should
be skipped
.

In contrast
, other
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parents
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think
that
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maths
is a
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very
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important
part in the education
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system and
they want their children to learn it. They
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think
that the subjects like
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maths
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helps
will
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help
their young ones in
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many
ways to solve the real life problems.
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Maths
would
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help
their kids develop a
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good
sense of understanding about numbers.
After all
,
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mathematics
provides students with a far
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different
perspective about the world.
For example
,
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maths can
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help
you
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ease
lots of daily activities which involve numbers such as bills, taxes, etc. For these reasons
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many
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parents
support
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maths
as a subject and wants it to
be taught
.

Should
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maths
be included
?
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Some
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parents
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think
its outdated and redundant while the other half
still
believes it as an
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important
topic. This issue discussed why
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parents
want their kids to learn
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maths
and why
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some
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parents
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think
it as an irrelevant topic to
be studied
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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