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Notice of Free Career WorkshopTaylor University invites all student and prospective students to take part in a free career workshop and resource fair, on Saturday, February 10. The purpose of the daylong event is to provide resources to students who want v.1

Notice of Free Career WorkshopTaylor University invites all student and prospective students to take part in a free career workshop and resource fair, on Saturday, February 10. The purpose of the daylong event is to provide resources to students who want v. 1
Several people prefer to take accessories like clothing, car, furniture, kitchen appliances et Cetra from well-known companies. The contributing factors behind purchasing branded objects are long-lasting and can be sold after using it. It is, completely, a negative advancement even though there have some benefits buying famous marked products. To begin with, there are two main reasons why people show interest in purchasing brand new items. Firstly, a product might last 50 years if it is bought from any popular institutions. For example, in Bangladesh, Aftab Furniture is a famous furniture company, who sells all their objects such as bed, dressing table, sofa, to name but a few, made from oak wood, which is very long-lasting. As a result, buyers can easily use this more than expected year. Secondly, they can sell that household property again that, at times, brings profit. Consequently, it not only saves cutting wood for making extra furniture, but it also diminishes the labour of workers. In my view, this trend brings a negative effect on society. The reason is that most of the well-known organizations, who claim their products as the best, have wealth to expand their businesses. Eventually, the local companies may have to run out of business due to the influence of a big company, which is considered a bad genre. Moreover, the general people, who have less money, could not find the local product due to the abundance of branded cars, household items, fabrics. Thus, the developments of stupendous companies have a bad impact on communities. In conclusion, a growing number of people would like to possess different sorts of branded items. The causes behind this are- it lasts a long time and that item may be sold again. However, in my opinion, it is a negative progression since numerous popular companies replace the small capital business through which the poor suffers.
Several
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people
prefer to take accessories like clothing, car,
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furniture
, kitchen
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appliances et
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Cetra
from well-known
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companies
. The contributing factors behind purchasing branded objects are long-lasting and can
be sold
after using it. It is, completely, a
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negative
advancement
even though
there have
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some
benefits buying
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famous
marked products.

To
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begin
with, there are two main reasons why
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people
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show
interest in purchasing
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brand new
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items
.
Firstly
, a product might last 50 years if it is
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bought
from any popular institutions.
For example
, in Bangladesh,
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Aftab
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Furniture
is a
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famous
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furniture
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company
, who sells all their objects such as bed, dressing table, sofa, to name
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but
a few, made from oak wood, which is
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very
long-lasting.
As a result
, buyers can
easily
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use
this more than
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expected
year.
Secondly
, they can sell that household property again that, at times, brings profit.
Consequently
, it not
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only
saves cutting wood for making extra
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furniture
,
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but
it
also
diminishes the
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labour
of workers.

In my view, this trend brings a
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negative
effect on society. The reason is that most of the well-known organizations, who claim their products as the best, have wealth to expand their businesses.
Eventually
, the local
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companies
may
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have to
run out of business due to the influence of a
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big
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company
, which
is considered
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
genre.
Moreover
, the general
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people
, who have less money, could not find the local product due to the abundance of branded cars, household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
, fabrics.
Thus
, the developments of stupendous
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companies
have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on communities.

In conclusion
, a growing number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
would like to possess
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
sorts of branded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
. The causes behind this are- it lasts a long time and that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
item
may
be sold
again.
However
, in my opinion, it is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
progression since numerous popular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
replace the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
capital business through which the poor suffers.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Notice of Free Career WorkshopTaylor University invites all student and prospective students to take part in a free career workshop and resource fair, on Saturday, February 10. The purpose of the daylong event is to provide resources to students who want v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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