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To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v.4

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v. 4
At the outset of this new millennium, a balanced diet is necessary to keep oneself fit and fine especially for the adolescents who need a nutritional diet for proper growth. It has a plenty of effects on the growth and development of juveniles. This essay will scrutinize the benefits of a complete diet on children. To embark with, most individuals concur with the statement that a healthy meal is essential for the all round development of an adolescent. In school, children have to perform a plethora of activities which includes curriculum as well as co-curricular activities. These activities require energy which can only be obtained by the proper diet. However, it is not everyone' s cup of tea to learn something without eating which results in a lack of concentration. In addition, teachers should not expect from a teenager to execute ameliorate performance with an empty stomach. For instance, a recent survey reveals that youngsters who do not eat properly in the school are slow learners. Moreover, without ingesting something the chances of fainting are sky rocketed. From my notion, it is a responsibility of school as well as parents to give a nutritional diet to students. Although parents should cook a perfect diet for students, still it is on the part of school authorities to make a menu of daily diets and send it to parents. Mulling over the topic, a healthy meal can take the pupils on heights of success but parents along with teachers need to pay careful attention towards eating habits of their offsprings.
At the outset of this new millennium, a balanced diet is necessary to
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keep
oneself fit and fine
especially
for the adolescents who need a nutritional diet for proper growth. It has a
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plenty
of effects on the growth and development of juveniles. This essay will scrutinize the benefits of a complete diet on children.

To embark with, most individuals concur with the statement that a healthy meal is essential for the all round development of an adolescent. In
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school
, children
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have to
perform a plethora of activities which includes curriculum
as well
as co-curricular activities. These activities require energy which can
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only
be obtained
by the proper diet.
However
, it is not
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, teachers should not
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expect
from a
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teenager
to execute ameliorate performance with an empty stomach.
For instance
, a recent survey reveals that youngsters who do not eat
properly
in the
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school
are slow learners.
Moreover
, without ingesting something the chances of fainting are
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sky rocketed
.

From my notion, it is a responsibility of
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school
as well
as parents to give a nutritional diet to students. Although parents should cook a perfect diet for students,
still
it is on the part of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
authorities to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a menu of daily diets and
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send
it to parents.

Mulling over the topic, a healthy meal can take the pupils on heights of success
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but
parents along with teachers need to pay careful attention towards eating habits of their
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offsprings
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IELTS essay To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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