Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

throughout history people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. what do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? how can people work forwards achieving an ideal society? v.6

throughout history people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. what do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? how can people work forwards achieving an ideal society? v. 6
Irrefutably, it is certainly true that people like to live in a society that is ideal in every aspect. However, it is the talk of the day that what an impeccable society should be like. This essay will look at some key elements which helps to make a perfect society. There are multifarious strategies which can contribute to make a civilization better place for living. The most important fact to consider is that folks ought to have social skills like honesty, empathy, respect, communication skills as well. The justification of the notion lies in upcoming illustrating, As old saying Honesty is the best policy which can give new direction to the community. It is needed for the prosperity of residents. If people are loyal toward each other then they will become able to take help from anyone in any situation. In addition to it, the inhabitants must be a helping hand with each other. The fact is that, being social animal everyone needs the help of the other persons to grow whether it is a financially or taking advice from each other. Moreover, it is mandatory to follow rules and regulations which are implemented by local authorities. By dint of these rules folks can be able to maintain tranquility as well as the development of the community. Moreover, masses should pay attention towards increasing crime rates, such as robbery, theft and murder. By reducing these evils a union may prove as a better place for livelihood. Last but not least, bureaucrats ought to provide marvellous amenities to local residences. For example good education system, hospitals, banking system and recreational sites as well as these services must be upgraded according to technology advancements. In accordance with the aforementioned augmentation, It is lucidly clear that the combined efforts of higher authorities and individuals can lead to the formation of a perfect society.
Irrefutably
, it is
certainly
true that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a society
that is
ideal in every aspect.
However
, it is the talk of the day that what an impeccable society should be like. This essay will look at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
key elements which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a perfect society.

There are multifarious strategies which can contribute to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a civilization better place for living. The most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
fact to consider is that folks ought to have social
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
like honesty, empathy, respect, communication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
as well
. The justification of the notion lies in upcoming illustrating, As
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
saying Honesty is the best policy which can give new direction to the community. It
is needed
for the prosperity of residents. If
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are loyal toward each
Did you mean "other than"?
other then
they will become able to take
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from anyone in any situation.
In addition
to it, the inhabitants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be a helping hand with each other. The fact is that, being social animal everyone needs the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of the other persons to grow whether it is a
financially
or taking advice from each other.

Moreover
, it is mandatory to follow
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations which
are implemented
by local authorities. By dint of these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
folks can be able to maintain tranquility
as well
as the development of the community.
Moreover
, masses should pay attention towards increasing crime rates, such as robbery, theft and murder. By reducing these evils a union may prove as a better place for livelihood. Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not least, bureaucrats ought to provide
Possible spelling mistake. 'marvellous' is British English.
marvellous
amenities to local residences.
For example
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
education system, hospitals, banking system and recreational sites
as well
as these services
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be upgraded
according to technology advancements.

In accordance with the aforementioned augmentation, It is
lucidly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the combined efforts of higher authorities and individuals can lead to the formation of a perfect society.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay throughout history people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. what do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? how can people work forwards achieving an ideal society? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts