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Many people, including adults, find it overwhelming to speak or make a presentation in front of an audience. It is therefore argued that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this skill important? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Many people, including adults, find it overwhelming to speak or make a presentation in front of an audience. It is therefore argued that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this skill important? with this opinion? v. 1
Even adults have problems talking comfortably in front of others. They feel stressed when they are expected to make a presentation. Some people argue that this skill should be part of the school curriculum. In my opinion, we cannot obtain a decent career without good presentation skills, so we should have presentation lessons as early as possible. I believe that speaking in front of others in a confident way is crucial to success. If we cannot express our ideas and thoughts clearly, we will not be able to achieve much. Whether you want a good score for your school project or you want to convince your customers, you should address them in an effective way. If you hesitate or look stressed, failure will be inevitable. No one would like to do business with incompetent people. Thus, I have the belief that presentation skills should be taught in schools. The earlier it begims, the better it will be. If we begin to practise these at early ages, we will have more time to master them. We do not necessarily have to wait till our internship to start talking in front of an audience. It may be initially hard, but with enough practice, we can all improve to a large extent. Schools will provide another benefit in terms of presentation skills. We can all learn to talk comfortably in front of others, but this will take much time. It will be based on trial and error. But, if teachers are involved in this process, they can spot our mistakes and give constructive feedback. In the long run, this will save us a lot of time. We will spare significantly less time to become proficient speakers. In conclusion, I believe that speaking in front others with confidence is important for our future. I also think that if this skill is taught at schools, we will become better at it because we will start practising it much earlier than usual and teachers' feedback will correct our mistakes.
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comfortably
in
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front
of others. They feel
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stressed
when they are
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expected
to
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make
a
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presentation
.
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Some
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people
argue that this
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skill
should be part of the
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school
curriculum. In my opinion, we cannot obtain a decent career without
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good
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presentation
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skills
,
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so
we should have
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presentation
lessons as early as possible.

I believe that speaking in
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front
of others
Consider replacing "in a confident way" with the adverb for "confident"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a confident way
is crucial to success. If we cannot express our
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ideas
and thoughts
clearly
, we will not be able to achieve much. Whether you want a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
score for your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
project or you want to convince your customers, you should address them
Consider replacing "in an effective way" with the adverb for "effective"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an effective way
. If you hesitate or look
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
, failure will be inevitable. No one would like to do business with incompetent
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people
.

Thus
, I have the belief that
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presentation
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skills
should
be taught
in
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schools
. The earlier it
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begims
, the better it will be. If we
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begin
to
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practise
these at early ages, we will have more
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time
to master them. We do not
necessarily
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have to
wait till our internship to
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start
talking in
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front
of an audience. It may be
initially
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hard
,
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but
with
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enough
practice, we can all
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improve
to a large extent.

Schools will provide another benefit in terms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
presentation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
. We can all learn to talk
comfortably
in
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front
of others,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this will take much
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time
. It will
be based
on trial and error.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, if teachers
are involved
in this process, they can spot our mistakes and give constructive feedback. In the long run, this will save us
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a lot of
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time
. We will spare
significantly
less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to become proficient speakers.

In conclusion
, I believe that speaking in
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front
others with confidence is
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important
for our future. I
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that if this
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skill
is taught
at
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schools
, we will become better at it
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because
we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
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practising
it much earlier than usual and teachers' feedback will correct our mistakes.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people, including adults, find it overwhelming to speak or make a presentation in front of an audience. It is therefore argued that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this skill important? with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
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5 paragraphs
333 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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