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This pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made
In today's era, both education and health facilities are important for the people. Some individuals opine that these elements should be free for all, while others suggesting to take from individuals themselves. Since I am going to discuss both of the views before provide my opinion. To commence with, health care and education services may provided by the nation for free of cost to their citizens. This will result in benefits whoever opt for it for sure. Firstly, if the government provides schooling to the children, all children will get the free schooling and they can get the employment and they do not have to worry about fund which is most critical in their life and can concentrate on the studies. Moving to the health care system, some low-income families are not able to afford to take medicine such as diabetes and critical heart problem. The unpaid system may relax them financially as its owned by country. Then the government can accumulate from the citizens by collecting taxes. For example, some developed countries adapted this approach. They collect money for unpaid hospitality through taxation. On the flip side, some individuals thinking that why cannot take this as a personal duty of health care and Education themselves. In this case, there might be a chance of overcrowd the hospital and missing of emergency cases those who are really needed. Although free education can be significantly increased the employment to citizen, it will also increase unemployment because the resources are limited on the globe. To sum-up, there are pros and cons for both free and paid services. I believe that the government should pay services only those who really in need and maintain the list of beneficiaries who are economically week and facilitates.
In
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today
's era, both
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education
and
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health
facilities are
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important
for the
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people
.
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Some
individuals opine that these elements should be
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free
for all, while others
The verb 'suggesting' is used with the gerund form: "suggesting taking".
suggesting to take
from individuals themselves. Since I am going to discuss both of the views
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before
provide my opinion.

To commence with,
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health
care and
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education
services may provided by the nation for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
of cost to their citizens. This will result in benefits whoever opt for it for sure.
Firstly
, if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
provides schooling to the children, all children will
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get
the
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free
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schooling and
they can
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get
the
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employment and
they do not
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have to
worry about fund which is most critical in their life and can concentrate on the studies. Moving to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
care system,
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some
low-income families are not able to afford to take medicine such as diabetes and critical heart problem. The unpaid system may relax them
financially
as its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
by country. Then the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can accumulate from the citizens by collecting taxes.
For example
,
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some
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developed countries
adapted this approach. They collect money for unpaid hospitality through taxation.

On the flip side,
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some
individuals thinking that why cannot take this as a personal duty of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
care and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Education
themselves.
In this case
, there might be a chance of overcrowd the hospital and missing of emergency cases those who are
really
needed. Although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
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education
can be
significantly
increased the employment to citizen, it will
also
increase unemployment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the resources
are limited
on the globe.

To sum-up, there are pros and cons for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
and paid services. I believe that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should pay services
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
those who
really
in need and maintain the list of beneficiaries who are
economically
week and facilitates.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay This pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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