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the chart below shows the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

the chart below shows the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.
IN CONTEMPORARY ERA, PROGRAMMABLE ROBOTICS ARE PROLIFERATING AT AN ALARMING RATE. THERE IS A GROWING PERCEPTION IN THE SOCIETY THAT ALL OCCUPATIONS WILL BE CARRIED OUT BY ROBOTS IN THE NEAR FUTURE. WHILE, I BELIEVE THAT MOST OF THE MEINAL AS WELL AS REGOROUS JOBS ARE LIKELY TO BE HEADED BY ARTIFICIAL INTELLEGENCE; HOWEVER, OTHERS THAT REQUIRE HUMAN PRESENCE WILL REMAIN IN THE HANDS OF HUMAN ONLY. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS ABOUT THE REASONS SUPPORTING MY OPINION. TO EMBARK ON, ROBOTS MAY REPLACE HUMAN BEINGS IN ALL THOSE JOBS WHICH DONOT REQUIRE ANY KIND OF SPECIFIC SKILLS AND EXPERIENCE. THE MAIN REASON BEHIND THIS TREND IS, EMPLOYING ROBOTS FOR SIMPLE TASKS WILL CONSIDERABLY REDUCE THE COST OF EMPLOYING THE MANPOWER. IN ADDITION, THE TOUGH JOBS THAT MAY JEOPARDISE THE LIVES OF HUMANS, WILL DEFENATELY BE CARRIED OUT BY MACHINES. COAL MINING, FOR EXAMPLE, IS A CUMBERSOME TASK FOR A LIVING CREATURE, WHEREAS, SUCH THREATENING JOBS WILL BE COMPLETED BY COMPUTER OPERATED MACHINE WITHOUT BEING CHANCE OF ANY MENANCE. THUS, IT IS CLEARLY VISIBLE THAT ROBOTS CAN FACILITATE THE INDUSTORY THROUGH MULTIPLE WAYS. ON THE OTHER SIDE, ADMITTEDLY, THOSE OCCUPATIONS THAT DEMAND HUMAN CONTACT AND THEIR ACTIVE INVOLVEMENT WILL NEVER LET DOWN. SIGNIFICANCE OF HUMANS IN SOME JOBS SUCH AS EDUCATION, PSYCHOLOGY, MEDICINES WILL REMAINAS IT AS FOR AGES. LACKING IN EXPRESSIONS, ABSENCE OF WORD COMMAND, AND BEING NON EMOTIONAL, ARE THE FACORTS PROVING ROBOTS INCOMPETENT FOR SOME SPECIFIC JOBS. AS PER EDUCATIONISTS, THE STUDY CONTENT TAUGHT BY SOME SOFTWARE PROGRAMMS SEEMS JUST LIKE SEDENTARY TALKS DUE TO ABSENCE OF EXPRESSIONS, WHICH WILL NOT BE AS EFFECTIVE AS EXPLAINED BY A TEACHER, WHO, NOT ONLY PARTICIPATE ACTIVELY, BUT ALSO FOSTER NEW LIFE IN STUDENTS THROUGH VARIETY OF GESTURES. HENCE, ITCAN BE SAID THAT ALL JOBS ARE NOT SUITABLE FOR ROBOTS. TO SUM UP, DESPITE OF THE FACT THAT TECHNOLOGY HAS INCORPRATED ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENT IN DAY TO DAY LIFE, NONTHELESS, DENIABLE FACT IS THE IMPORTANCE OF MANPOWER WILL NEVER BE COMPLETELY OMITTED FROM THE WORLD.
IN CONTEMPORARY ERA, PROGRAMMABLE ROBOTICS ARE PROLIFERATING AT AN ALARMING RATE. THERE IS A GROWING PERCEPTION IN THE SOCIETY THAT ALL OCCUPATIONS WILL
BE CARRIED
OUT BY ROBOTS IN THE NEAR FUTURE. WHILE, I BELIEVE THAT MOST OF THE
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MEINAL
AS WELL
AS
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REGOROUS
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JOBS
ARE LIKELY TO
BE HEADED
BY ARTIFICIAL
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INTELLEGENCE
;
HOWEVER
, OTHERS THAT REQUIRE
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HUMAN
PRESENCE WILL REMAIN IN THE HANDS OF
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HUMAN
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ONLY
. THIS ESSAY WILL
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DISCUSS ABOUT THE
REASONS SUPPORTING MY OPINION.

TO EMBARK ON, ROBOTS MAY REPLACE
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HUMAN
BEINGS IN ALL THOSE
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JOBS
WHICH
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DONOT
REQUIRE ANY KIND OF SPECIFIC
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SKILLS
AND EXPERIENCE. THE MAIN REASON BEHIND THIS TREND IS, EMPLOYING ROBOTS FOR SIMPLE TASKS WILL
CONSIDERABLY
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REDUCE
THE COST OF EMPLOYING THE MANPOWER.
IN ADDITION
, THE TOUGH
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JOBS
THAT MAY
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JEOPARDISE
THE
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LIVES
OF
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HUMANS
, WILL
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DEFENATELY
BE CARRIED
OUT BY MACHINES. COAL MINING,
FOR EXAMPLE
, IS A CUMBERSOME TASK FOR A LIVING CREATURE, WHEREAS, SUCH THREATENING
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JOBS
WILL
BE COMPLETED
BY COMPUTER OPERATED MACHINE WITHOUT BEING CHANCE OF ANY
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MENANCE
.
THUS
, IT IS
CLEARLY
VISIBLE THAT ROBOTS CAN FACILITATE THE
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INDUSTORY
THROUGH MULTIPLE WAYS.

ON THE OTHER SIDE,
ADMITTEDLY
, THOSE OCCUPATIONS THAT DEMAND
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HUMAN
CONTACT AND THEIR ACTIVE INVOLVEMENT WILL NEVER
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LET
DOWN. SIGNIFICANCE OF
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HUMANS
IN
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SOME
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JOBS
SUCH AS EDUCATION, PSYCHOLOGY, MEDICINES WILL
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REMAINAS
IT AS FOR AGES. LACKING IN EXPRESSIONS, ABSENCE OF WORD COMMAND, AND BEING
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NON EMOTIONAL
, ARE THE
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FACORTS
PROVING ROBOTS INCOMPETENT FOR
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SOME
SPECIFIC
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JOBS
. AS PER EDUCATIONISTS, THE STUDY CONTENT TAUGHT BY
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SOME
SOFTWARE
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PROGRAMMS
SEEMS
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JUST
LIKE SEDENTARY TALKS DUE TO ABSENCE OF EXPRESSIONS, WHICH WILL NOT BE AS EFFECTIVE AS
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EXPLAINED
BY A TEACHER, WHO, NOT
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ONLY
PARTICIPATE
ACTIVELY
,
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BUT
ALSO
FOSTER NEW LIFE IN STUDENTS THROUGH VARIETY OF GESTURES.
HENCE
,
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ITCAN
BE SAID
THAT ALL
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JOBS
ARE NOT SUITABLE FOR ROBOTS.

TO SUM UP,
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DESPITE OF
THE FACT THAT TECHNOLOGY HAS
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INCORPRATED
ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENT IN DAY TO DAY LIFE,
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NONTHELESS
, DENIABLE FACT IS THE IMPORTANCE OF MANPOWER WILL NEVER BE COMPLETELY OMITTED FROM THE WORLD.
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IELTS essay the chart below shows the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7
Overall Band Score
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