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Think of the most important class you have ever had. Why did you enjoy this class so much? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v.1

Think of the most important class you have ever had. Why did you enjoy this class so much? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 1
Due to the advancements in the technology now everything has become possible in all facets of our life. Technology has touched and impacted many fields like medical, science, education etc. Other than that, many researches and studies are also performed in the area of the environment by the environmentalists to solve the problem of pollution and the global warming. Some people argue that the technology will resolve all the problems experienced by the world today. However, I strongly believe that, though technology is beneficial in many ways, but it is not only the solution of the environmental problems. The Environment is distorted in many ways. Firstly, cutting of trees to construct new buildings which disturbs the natural environment cycle. Secondly, over usage of petrol and diesel operated vehicles that create pollution and therefore cause depletion of the ozone layer. Thirdly, usage of plastic which is a non recyclable product and is not absorbed by the soil itself, hence reducing fertility of soil. Finally, there are an uncountable number of reasons that are increasing pollution day by day. Considering the points above, people are mainly responsible for damaging the environment and natural resources. Technology can invent solutions to deal with the most important problems like global warming and pollution. For example, battery operated cars has reduced pollution up to some level in some parts of the world. But, it is indeed the moral responsibility of the citizens to help making the environment green and pollution free. All in all, I strongly assert that the technology can assist human kind in multiple ways to reduce the environmental problems in the world, but people support and concern about the environment is much needed in this regard.
Due to the advancements in the
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technology
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now
everything has become possible in all facets of our life.
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Technology
has touched and impacted
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many
fields like medical, science, education etc. Other than that,
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many
researches and studies are
also
performed in the area of the
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environment
by the environmentalists to solve the
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problem
of
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pollution
and the global warming.
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Some
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people
argue that the
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technology
will resolve all the
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problems
experienced by the world
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today
.
However
, I
strongly
believe that, though
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technology
is beneficial in
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many
ways,
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but
it is not
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only
the solution of the environmental problems.

The
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Environment
is distorted
in
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many
ways.
Firstly
, cutting of trees to construct new buildings which disturbs the natural
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environment
cycle.
Secondly
, over usage of petrol and diesel operated vehicles that create
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pollution
and
therefore
cause depletion of the ozone layer.
Thirdly
, usage of plastic which is a
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non recyclable
product and is not absorbed by the soil itself,
hence
reducing fertility of soil.
Finally
, there are an uncountable number of reasons that are increasing
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pollution
day by day.

Considering the points above,
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people
are
mainly
responsible for damaging the
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environment
and natural resources.
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Technology
can invent solutions to deal with the most
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important
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problems
like global warming and
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pollution
.
For example
, battery operated cars has
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reduced
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pollution
up to
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some
level in
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some
parts of the world.
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But
, it is
indeed
the moral responsibility of the citizens to
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help
The verb 'help' is used with an infinitive: "to make" or "make".
making
the
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environment
green and
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pollution
free.

All in all, I
strongly
assert that the
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technology
can assist human kind in multiple ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the environmental
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problems
in the world,
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but
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people
support and concern about the
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environment
is
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much needed
in this regard.
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Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
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IELTS essay Think of the most important class you have ever had. Why did you enjoy this class so much? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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