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Tell me something about your secondary school Which subject did you find most difficult at school why Do you ever need that subject now Why Why not What did you enjoy about being a school student v.1

Tell me something about your secondary school Which subject did you find most difficult at school why Do you ever need that subject now Why Why not What did you enjoy about being a school student v. 1
Due to the inevitably fast changing world and the continuous need to sustain business and personal necessities, it becomes customary for people to work harder and stay longer in their workplace. This essay will tackle both the benefits and detriments of this which will cite personal experiences as well. One of the advantages of working overtime is that people may specialize quickly and eventually become experts in their field of work or profession. As a result, it would allow a better chance for fast promotion, hence, would provide a huge financial help to support their family or personal needs. For example, during my first year with my current company, I used to spend a lot of overtime work due to volumes of workloads and hectic deadlines to meet, considering that there were less workforce in our team. As I stay in the office most of the time, I easily learned the process which helps me get promoted to a Senior role within just a year. On the other hand, having no work-life balance has also many drawbacks. Firstly, quality time to spend with the family is being compromised, thus, it may affect the relationship and bond that they have. Secondly, people have lesser time to do recreational activities, hobbies or something they are passionate about, other than work. As a matter of fact, when people have the ability to be more productive on other things that they really love, more often than not, it opens doors for other opportunities and self-fulfilment. For instance, as I worked very hard for my office deliverables, I tend to neglect to spend time with my hobbies like gardening. I always thought of making a business out of it, but because of the demand of work, I often must choose to use my little spare time to have a good rest and stay well, instead of doing my hobbies. In summary, the notable advantages of spending too much time at work is it will help people’s chance to rapidly move up the corporate ladder and will provide a better financial support. However, the disadvantages would be lesser time with family and do other productive recreations or hobbies which might lead to future opportunities.
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inevitably
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fast
changing world and the continuous need to sustain business and personal necessities, it becomes customary for
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people
to
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work
harder and stay longer in their workplace. This essay will tackle both the benefits and detriments of this which will cite personal experiences
as well
.

One of the advantages of working overtime is that
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people
may specialize
quickly
and
eventually
become experts in their field of
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work
or profession.
As a result
, it would
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allow
a better chance for
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fast
promotion,
hence
, would provide a huge financial
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help
to support their family or personal needs.
For example
, during my
first
year with my
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current
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company
, I
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used
to spend
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a lot of
overtime
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work
due to volumes of workloads and hectic deadlines to
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meet
, considering that there were less workforce in our team. As I stay in the office most of the
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time
, I
easily
learned the process which
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helps
me
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get
promoted to a Senior role within
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just
a year.

On the
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other
hand, having no work-life balance has
also
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many
drawbacks.
Firstly
, quality
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time
to spend with the family is
being compromised
,
thus
, it may affect the relationship and bond that they have.
Secondly
,
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people
have lesser
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time
to do recreational activities, hobbies or something they are passionate about,
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other
than
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work
. As a matter of fact, when
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people
have the ability to be more productive on
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other
things that they
really
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love
, more
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often
than not, it opens doors for
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other
opportunities and
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self-fulfilment
.
For instance
, as I worked
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very
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hard
for my office deliverables, I tend to neglect to spend
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time
with my hobbies like gardening. I always
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thought
of making a business out of it,
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but
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because
of the demand of
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work
, I
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often
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must
choose to
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use
my
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little
spare
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time
to have a
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good
rest and stay well,
instead
of doing my hobbies.

In summary, the notable advantages of spending too much
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time
at
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work
is it will
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help
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people’s
chance to
rapidly
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move
up the corporate ladder and will provide a better financial support.
However
, the disadvantages would be lesser
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time
with family and do
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other
productive recreations or hobbies which might lead to future opportunities.
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IELTS essay Tell me something about your secondary school Which subject did you find most difficult at school why Do you ever need that subject now Why Why not What did you enjoy about being a school student v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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