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Think of a book that you have not read but are interested in reading. Explain why the book was important to you. Give specific details and examples to explain your answer. v.2

Think of a book that you have not read but are interested in reading. Explain why the book was important to you. Give specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 2
Revolutionary technological innovations are playing significant role in solving previously unsolvable crime cases nowadays. As a result of this, we can now witness a huge reduction in the amount of criminal activities taking place in our society. There are primarily 2 technological innovations namely DNA profiling and CCTV footages contributing enormously to this phenomenon. With the help of DNA profiling, it has now become very easy to trace back the identity of a potential person who is involved in committing the offence. Samples collected from the crime scene such as blood, hair, skin or saliva will be processed and a DNA profile of the person will be created using this technology. This profile, then be used to search for any matches in the existing repositories of these profiles. If there is no match found, then it can also be used to find out related ancestry connections, so that the search can be narrowed down to fewer people. Consequently, in very few days, if not months, police are able to track down the criminals and are able to bring them to justice. This approach is contributing to the reduction of antisocial activities in the society. On the other hand, CCTV cameras. Thanks to the technology development, which has made these devices so economical to buy, all most all the public areas along with most of the residential and commercial places are equipped with CCTV cameras in recent times. We have seen many instances where the footage from these cameras helped to identify the person committing an unlawful activity in real time. And as a result, it became so easy to catch hold of those individuals performing these heinous activities. Subsequently, culprits are afraid of being caught and taking a step back. This is directly letting the crime numbers go south. In conclusion, as the technology getting sophisticated, the rate at which these unlawful acts taking place is reducing.
Revolutionary technological innovations are playing significant role in solving previously unsolvable crime cases nowadays.
As a result
of this, we can
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now
witness a huge reduction in the amount of criminal
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activities
taking place in our society. There are
primarily
2 technological innovations
namely
DNA profiling and CCTV
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footages
contributing
enormously
to this phenomenon.

With the
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help
of DNA profiling, it has
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now
become
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very
easy to trace back the identity of a potential person who
is involved
in committing the
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offence
. Samples collected from the crime scene such as blood, hair, skin or saliva will
be processed
and a DNA profile of the person will
be created
using this technology. This profile, then be
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used
to search for any matches in the existing repositories of these profiles. If there is no match found, then it can
also
be
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used
to find out related ancestry connections,
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so
that the search can
be narrowed
down to fewer
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people
.
Consequently
, in
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very
few days, if not months, police are able to
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track
down the criminals and are able to bring them to justice. This approach is contributing to the reduction of antisocial
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activities
in the society.

On the other hand
, CCTV cameras. Thanks to the technology development, which has made these devices
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so
economical to
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buy
,
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all most
all the public areas along with most of the residential and commercial places
are equipped
with CCTV cameras in recent times. We have
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seen
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many
instances where the footage from these cameras
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helped
to identify the person committing an unlawful
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activity
in real time. And
as a result
, it became
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
easy to catch hold of those individuals performing these heinous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
.
Subsequently
, culprits are afraid of
being caught
and taking a step back. This is
directly
letting the crime numbers go south.

In conclusion
, as the technology getting sophisticated, the rate at which these unlawful acts taking place is reducing.
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IELTS essay Think of a book that you have not read but are interested in reading. Explain why the book was important to you. Give specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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