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TPO26-1: Think of a book that you have not read but are interested in reading. Explain why the book was important to you. Give specific details and examples to explain your answer. v.1

TPO26-1: Think of a book that you have not read but are interested in reading. Explain why the book was important to you. Give specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 1
People have different perspectives about the uniform’s necessity at the workplace. While it is believed by some people that all employees should wear company provided dress, others think that wearing a uniform is not necessary. In my opinion, all staff should put on the uniform during the working hours at their organization. On the one hand, some people contemplate that companies should require every employee to wear the company’s specific dress, and I agree. The plausible reason behind this thinking is that uniform creates a sense of unity among the colleagues. In other words, all members of the company think that they are in a team, which helps them to achieve the company’s goal. For example, studies have shown that employees, who wear a uniform, can successfully fill up the sales’ target compared to the staff, who do not need to wear a uniform. Another worth mentioning cause is that all employees are regarded as having the same social status. That means differences in social classes do not affect the workplace if all employees wear a uniform. On the other hand, it is said by some people that wearing a uniform is unnecessary. They think that every person has a right to choose what should wear or not. If any company forces to wear a specific dress, then their basic right to freedom will be hampered. In this case, workers will be despair, which will negatively affect the company’s performance. For instance, in Britain, a huge number of workers resigned from their job, when a forced them to wear a uniform. Moreover, people think that dresses, which are comfortable, facilitate to work effectively and efficiently. In conclusion, although people have various views about the wearing of uniforms, I think a uniform is vital for feeling as a part of a group and achieving career target smoothly.
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perspectives about
the
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uniform’s
necessity at the workplace. While it
is believed
by
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some
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people
that all
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employees
should
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wear
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company
provided
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dress
, others
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think
that wearing a
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uniform
is not necessary. In my opinion, all staff should put on the
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uniform
during the working hours at their organization.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
contemplate that
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companies
should require every
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employee
to
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wear
the
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company’s
specific
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dress
, and I
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. The plausible reason behind this thinking is that
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uniform
creates a sense of unity among the colleagues.
In other words
, all members of the
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company
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think
that they are in a team, which
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helps
them to achieve the
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company’s
goal.
For example
, studies have shown that
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employees
, who
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wear
a
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uniform
, can
successfully
fill up the sales’ target compared to the staff, who do not need to
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wear
a
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uniform
. Another worth mentioning cause is that all
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employees
are regarded
as having the same social status. That means differences in social classes do not affect the workplace if all
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employees
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wear
a uniform.

On the other hand
, it
is said
by
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some
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people
that wearing a
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uniform
is unnecessary. They
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think
that every person has a right to choose what should
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wear
or not. If any
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company
forces to
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wear
a specific
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dress
, then their basic right to freedom will
be hampered
.
In this case
, workers will be despair, which will
negatively
affect the
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company’s
performance.
For instance
, in Britain, a huge number of workers resigned from their job, when a forced them to
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wear
a
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uniform
.
Moreover
,
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people
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think
that
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dresses
, which are comfortable, facilitate to work
effectively
and
efficiently
.

In conclusion
, although
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people
have various views about the wearing of
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uniforms
, I
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think
a
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uniform
is vital for feeling as a part of a group and achieving career target
smoothly
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO26-1: Think of a book that you have not read but are interested in reading. Explain why the book was important to you. Give specific details and examples to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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