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The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom v.1

The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom v. 1
It is generally seen that in this materialistic world people addicted to purchase new things for fulfil their needs. According to my ideology this trend has negative impacts on an individual's life as well as on our environment. To begin with, excessive shopping leads to the squandering of money, which create many obstacles in life of the masses. In other word, when people utilize their money on unnecessary things. Then they face financial problems because in this inflation era, mostly things are not in a range of people, however for showing their status in society they borrow money from banks and other people. According to a recent survey by BBC news channel showed that more than half population in India reeling under financial hurdles because their expenses are more than their wages. Probing ahead, when people buy new things, then they discard their old things in the trash, which eventually ends up in a landfill site. These landfill sites are full of non-recyclable and toxic matter that can harm flora and fauna. Hence, massive amount of disposing component deterioration our climate at an alarming rate. Therefore, it is also claimed by environment experts 90 percent animals and habitats are disturbed by dumping grounds. If people will not put a cap on buy excessive things, then in upcoming years, some species of flora and fauna will extinct To recapitulate, after analysing the entire writing. I conclude that instead of disbursing money on unnecessary things people should donate money for social development and people also should minimize the amount of scrap they throw out.
It is
generally
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seen
that in this materialistic world
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people
addicted to
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purchase
new things for fulfil their needs. According to my ideology this trend has
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negative
impacts on an individual's life
as well
as on our environment.

To
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begin
with, excessive shopping leads to the squandering of
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money
, which create
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many
obstacles in life of the masses. In other word, when
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people
utilize their
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money
on unnecessary things. Then they face financial problems
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
in this inflation era,
mostly
things are not in a range of
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people
,
however
for showing their status in society they borrow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
from banks and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. According to a recent survey by BBC news channel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that more than half population in India reeling under financial hurdles
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because
their expenses are more than their wages.

Probing ahead, when
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
new things, then they discard their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
things in the trash, which
eventually
ends up in a landfill site. These landfill sites are full of non-recyclable and toxic matter that can harm flora and fauna.
Hence
, massive amount of disposing component deterioration our climate at an alarming rate.
Therefore
, it is
also
claimed by environment experts 90 percent animals and habitats
are disturbed
by dumping grounds. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will not put a cap on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
excessive things, then in upcoming years,
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some
species of flora and fauna will extinct

To recapitulate, after
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analysing
the entire writing. I conclude that
instead
of disbursing
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money
on unnecessary things
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should donate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
for social development and
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people
also
should minimize the amount of scrap they throw out.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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