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TASK 2Describe the last book you read. You should say: What the book was, who was the author, why did you read that book, and your personal feelings after reading that book. v.1

TASK 2Describe the last book you read. You should say: What the book was, who was the author, why did you read that book, and your personal feelings after reading that book. v. 1
There is a difference in people's opinions regarding learning and playing for children. On the one hand, some support that they attend classes outside regular school, on the other hand, others disapprove that idea and claim that children should be given time to involve in outdoor activities. While extra classes may help keep them away from bad company, I believe that playing will aid in building their brains. Additional lectures are essential because it ensures children are able to avoid unhealthy association. If they are not fully engaged in educational activities after school, they may eventually fall into the wrong peer groups, which will not only offer immoral advice but also encourage an act of indiscipline. For instance, most secondary schools in my country, Nigeria, have made it mandatory for their students to take such classes so that they are kept away from bad company. However, this essay disagrees with this assertion because many children have been seen indulging in social vices despite hours of outside normal school lectures they are involved in. In contrast, there is considerable support for the notion that children should be allowed time to play and I completely agree. This is because it helps to improve children's cognitive and creative skills. The school curriculum is a bias of practicalities, but they are needed in the future to excel in business and in dealing with colleagues at the workplace. A team of educational experts, for example, carried out an investigation in 1998 at Brimstone University, UK. Their aim was to know the impact of play on children. They found out that adults who enjoyed adequate playing time when they were younger tend to effectively solve problems and seamlessly show attributes of team spirit. Thus, that example, supports the view that playing should be a vital aspect of children's lives if they want to do well in years to come. To sum up, while people may vary largely in their opinions, I hold the view that children should enjoy some playing time for their mental development.
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people
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playing
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children
. On the one hand,
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some
support that they attend classes outside regular
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school
,
on the other hand
, others disapprove that
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idea
and claim that
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children
should be
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given
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time
to involve in outdoor activities. While extra classes may
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help
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keep
them away from
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bad
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company
, I believe that
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playing
will aid in building their brains.

Additional lectures are essential
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because
it ensures
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children
are able to avoid unhealthy association. If they are not
fully
engaged in educational activities after
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school
, they may
eventually
fall into the
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wrong
peer groups, which will not
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only
offer immoral advice
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but
also
encourage an act of indiscipline.

For instance
, most secondary
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schools
in my country, Nigeria, have made it mandatory for their students to take such classes
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so
that they are
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kept
away from
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bad
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company
.
However
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because
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many
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children
have been
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seen
indulging in social vices despite hours of outside normal
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school
lectures they
are involved
in.

In contrast
, there is considerable support for the notion that
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children
should be
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allowed
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time
to play and I completely
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agree
. This is
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because
it
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helps
to
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improve
children's cognitive and creative
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skills
. The
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school
curriculum is a bias of practicalities,
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but
they
are needed
in the future to excel in business and in dealing with colleagues at the workplace. A team of educational experts,
for example
, carried out an investigation in 1998 at Brimstone University, UK. Their aim was to know the impact of play on
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children
. They found out that adults who enjoyed adequate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
playing
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time
when they were younger tend to
effectively
solve problems and
seamlessly
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show
attributes of team spirit.
Thus
, that example, supports the view that
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playing
should be a vital aspect of children's
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lives
if they want to do well in years to
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come
.

To sum up, while
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people
may vary
largely
in their opinions, I hold the view that
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children
should enjoy
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some
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playing
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time
for their mental development.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay TASK 2Describe the last book you read. You should say: What the book was, who was the author, why did you read that book, and your personal feelings after reading that book. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
339 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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