Television and other forms of entertainment have a strong effect in developing the values and influencing the behaviour of children. Sadly, the majority of programs show inappropriate violent content. I agree that such violent programs have an adverse effect on the children’s behaviour.
Violence occurs in our society everyday and the media presents it in different shapes. The media give inappropriate contents more preference as many people like it which in return generate them huge profits. However, they do not think about the children of the society who may likely to take it negatively. For instance, many dramas on TV show that how to violence occur and how it is dealt but preference is more given to its occurrence rather than it’s encounter and such actions are then repeated in the society.
In addition, the programs on TV are no longer necessary to watch without adult supervision. Many commercials divert the attention of kids from the program they are watching to the ones that are for adults. Even many contents are played beside with children’s made series which are often inappropriate and create a mind for children to do the same in real life. Like many cases have been revealed recently where children commit serious crimes because of watching violent TV shows.
In conclusion, I believe that the cause of many of the problems, especially youth crimes in today’s world is the huge amount of inappropriate contents on Television and other forms of entertainment. Thus, it alerts government to take steps to control it by implementing legislations that do not allow the spread of violence.
Television and other forms of entertainment have a strong effect in developing the values and influencing the
behaviour
of
children
.
Sadly
, the majority of
programs
show
inappropriate
violent
content
. I
agree
that such violent
programs
have an adverse effect on the
children’s
behaviour
.
Violence occurs in our society
everyday
and the media presents it in
different
shapes. The media give
inappropriate
contents more preference as
many
people
like it which in return generate them huge profits.
However
, they do not
think
about the
children
of the society who may likely to take it
negatively
.
For instance
,
many
dramas on TV
show
that how to violence occur and how it
is dealt
but
preference is more
given
to its occurrence
rather
than it’s encounter and such actions are then repeated in the society.
In addition
, the
programs
on TV are no longer necessary to
watch
without adult supervision.
Many
commercials divert the attention of kids from the
program
they are watching to the ones that are for adults. Even
many
contents
are played
beside with
children’s
made series which are
often
inappropriate
and create a mind for
children
to do the same in real life. Like
many
cases have
been revealed
recently where
children
commit serious crimes
because
of watching violent TV
shows
.
In conclusion
, I believe that the cause of
many
of the problems,
especially
youth crimes in
today
’s world is the huge amount of
inappropriate
contents on Television and other forms of entertainment.
Thus
, it alerts
government
to take steps to control it by implementing
legislations
that do not
allow
the spread of violence.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes