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These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than following a healthy lifestyle. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own kn v.2

These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than following a healthy lifestyle. 2
Thanks to a free flow of information literally on everything, people now are more knowledgeableabout the ways to keep fit. At the same time, however, medicine is far more advanced than ever, thus making some people more reliant on doctors, rather than taking initiative to lead a healthier lifestyle. There has never been a better time for those who take interest in keeping fit. A wide variety of applications for our devices are being created almost on a daily basis, and most of them can be downloaded free of charge. These apps can do virtually anything from tracking one’s heart rate to urging individuals to do a certain sets of push-ups. Even if you are technically challenged, the fitness facilities available today are so appealing that you sign up in a heartbeat. All it takes, then is a sheer commitment. On the other hand, there are those who, due to various reasons, choose to let doctors worry about their health. For most of them, keeping a healthy diet or doing a regular physical exercise are not a top priority. The prevalence of fast food chains coupled with a hectic lifestyle, most people are unwilling to cook healthy meals at home, opting for a less time-consuming option even at the expense of far-reaching consequences of unhealthy eating. Others may simply be too lazy to be committed to a physically active life. Over-reliance on our cars and a sedentary life-style are making it even harder to lead a healthier way of life. Having said that, there are those whose health conditions do not allow being physically active, thus leaving them no choice but to be dependent on doctors and medicines. Although medical science has come a long way, individuals should not take a healthy lifestyle for granted. At the end of the day, the prevention is better than cure.
Thanks to a free flow of information
literally
on everything,
people
now
are more
knowledgeableabout
the ways to
keep
fit. At the same time,
however
, medicine is far more advanced than ever,
thus
making
some
people
more reliant on doctors,
rather
than taking initiative to lead a healthier lifestyle.

There has never been a better time for those who take interest in keeping fit. A wide variety of applications for our devices are
being created
almost on a daily basis, and most of them can
be downloaded
free of charge. These apps can do
virtually
anything from tracking one’s heart rate to urging individuals to do a certain sets of push-ups. Even if you are
technically
challenged, the fitness facilities available
today
are
so
appealing that you
sign
up in a heartbeat. All it takes, then is a sheer commitment.

On the other hand
, there are those who, due to various reasons, choose to
let
doctors worry about their health. For most of them, keeping a healthy diet or doing a regular physical exercise are not a top priority. The prevalence of
fast
food chains coupled with a hectic lifestyle, most
people
are unwilling to cook healthy meals at home, opting for a less time-consuming option even at the expense of far-reaching consequences of unhealthy eating. Others may
simply
be too lazy to
be committed
to a
physically
active life. Over-reliance on our cars and a sedentary life-style are making it even harder to lead a healthier way of life. Having said that, there are those whose health conditions do not
allow
being
physically
active,
thus
leaving them no choice
but
to be dependent on doctors and medicines.

Although medical science has
come
a long way, individuals should not take a healthy lifestyle for granted. At the
end
of the day, the prevention is better than cure.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than following a healthy lifestyle. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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