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These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages? v.6

These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages? v. 6
It is considered that a lot of educational institutes are providing their studies through the internet. However, some of them are of the opinion that online classes are more positive than the traditional way of lectures. Furthermore, there is a group that believes that this development got a negative impact on the education. In my point of view, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. First of all, online teaching is less motivating than receiving information in a typical group lesson. The reason for this is that in a class you will see a lot of classmates doing their best to achieve the same goal. While, at home nobody is there to influence you. For example, a lot of students are not completing their schooling at home because of the lack of inspiration. So, that's why it is more significant to join a conventional classroom. Secondly, it is demanding to find employment with an online coaching diploma. This is because employers are looking for the best educated pupils. The reason for this is that they believe that those students have received less educational guidance. Although, students who went to the university made the more experience during the training days. For instance, those peoples were required to complete a specific number of hours to complete their exams. All in all, managers of companies do prefer to have a staff that is able to perform a huge amount of duties. To conclude, there are some universities who are providing online classes. There is a class of people that believe it can have some negative effects. I strongly believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages because online studies are less stimulating and most directors are cheerful with high schooled group members.
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a lot of
educational institutes are providing their studies through the internet.
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some
of them are of the opinion that
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online
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classes
are more
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positive
than the traditional way of lectures.
Furthermore
, there is a group that
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believes
that this development
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got
a
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negative
impact on the education. In my point of view, I
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believe
that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

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First of all
,
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online
teaching is less motivating than receiving information in a typical group lesson.
The reason for this is
that in a
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class
you will
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see
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a lot of
classmates doing their best to achieve the same goal.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
, at home nobody is there to influence you.
For example
,
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a lot of
students are not completing their schooling at home
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because
of the lack of inspiration.
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So
, that's why it is more significant to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
a conventional classroom.

Secondly
, it is demanding to find employment with an
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online
coaching diploma. This is
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because
employers are looking for the best educated pupils.
The reason for this is
that they
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believe
that those students have received less educational guidance.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, students who went to the university made the more experience during the training days.
For instance
, those peoples
were required
to complete a specific number of hours to complete their exams. All in all, managers of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
do prefer to have a staff
that is
able to perform a huge amount of duties.

To conclude
, there are
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some
universities who are providing
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online
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classes
. There is a
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class
of
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people
that
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believe
it can have
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some
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negative
effects. I
strongly
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believe
that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
studies are less stimulating and most directors are cheerful with high schooled group members.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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