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These days, many people prefer ready –to-eat food outside of their home rather than home-made food. Do you think this have more advantages than disadvantages. v.1

These days, many people prefer ready –to-eat food outside of their home rather than home-made food. Do you think this have more advantages than disadvantages. v. 1
Modern life is fast paced and people often do not have enough time to cook their meals at home. Therefore, many opt for ready-made meals to save time and effort. However, I believe that this type of food has a negative health impact, and this makes their drawbacks outweigh their advantages. It is undoubted that ready-to-eat meals provide easy and quick alternative to home-cooked meals. This type of food products sold cooked, processed and packaged and do not need much preparation. Sandwiches, salad, pizza, soup, and noodles are examples of popular ready-made meals that can be found on supermarkets’ shelves. Furthermore, these precooked meals last longer than fresh food and can be frozen and stored for several days. For instance, my aunt Mary usually has some ready meals in her refrigerator, and use them when she does not have time to cook dinner. On the other hand, ready meals can have a damaging effects on health. First, they contain a high level of salt and saturated fat, which are linked to hypertension and heart diseases. A previous report by the WHO showed that 80% of precooked food products in the market contain more than the daily recommended amount of salt. Moreover, ready-to-eat meals are often composed of highly processed food that have been stripped of his nutrients. The amount of minerals and vitamins in these products is very low compared with fresh food and home-cooked repasts. For example, a can of vegetable soup will far less nutrients than a vegetable soup cooked at home from fresh ingredients. To conclude, I believe that the shortcomings of ready –to-eat meals are far more than their advantages. They are less healthy than home –prepared meals and contain more salt and fat.
Modern life is
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fast
paced and
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people
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often
do not have
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enough
time to cook their
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meals
at home.
Therefore
,
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many
opt for ready-made
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meals
to save time and effort.
However
, I believe that this type of
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food
has a
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negative
health impact, and this
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makes
their drawbacks outweigh their advantages.

It
is undoubted
that ready-to-eat
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meals
provide easy and quick alternative to home-cooked
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meals
. This type of
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food
products sold cooked, processed and packaged and do not need much preparation. Sandwiches, salad, pizza, soup, and noodles are examples of popular ready-made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meals
that can
be found
on supermarkets’ shelves.
Furthermore
, these precooked
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meals
last longer than fresh
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food
and can
be frozen
and stored for several days.
For instance
, my aunt Mary
usually
has
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some
ready
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meals
in her refrigerator, and
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use
them when she does not have time to cook dinner.

On the other hand
, ready
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meals
can have a damaging
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effects
on health.
First
, they contain a high level of salt and saturated
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fat
, which
are linked
to hypertension and heart diseases. A previous report by the WHO
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showed
that 80% of precooked
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food
products in the market contain more than the daily recommended amount of salt.
Moreover
, ready-to-eat
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meals
are
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often
composed of
highly
processed
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food
that have
been stripped
of his nutrients. The amount of minerals and vitamins in these products is
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very
low compared with fresh
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food
and home-cooked repasts.
For example
, a can of vegetable soup will far
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less
nutrients than a vegetable soup cooked at home from fresh ingredients.

To conclude
, I believe that the shortcomings of ready –to-eat
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meals
are far more than their advantages. They are less healthy than home –prepared
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meals
and contain more salt and
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fat
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay These days, many people prefer ready –to-eat food outside of their home rather than home-made food. Do you think this have more advantages than disadvantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
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