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It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university while others claim that a university education should be a universal right Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion v.2

It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university while others claim that a university education should be a universal right 2
It has been argued that nurturing dogs in urban areas is unsuitable. Although allowing dogs to live in their natural habitats is beneficial to some extent, it is better to raise dogs in metropolitan areas. On the one hand, letting dogs live in their wildlife exerts potential significant impacts on both dogs and human beings. In fact, in their natural environment, dogs follow and develop their instincts - such as a keen sense of smell - to catch prey. This helps them be more physically active and generally healthy compared to domestication ones. In addition, because their ancestor is a wild animal, they sometimes inevitably bring possible hazards to humans, especially young kids. For example, in Vietnam, eating a bite of chocolate, one family dog became unexpectedly crazy and bit a newborn, which caused that infant’s painful death. On the other hand, there are some reasons why nurturing dogs in inner-city areas is more beneficial. The first reason is that there are lots of vulnerable and disabled dogs, which cannot compete with other predators to survive in such an extreme environment. This makes sustainable human feeding and affection become irreplaceable sources of their livings. Another reason is that having dogs as a pet prevents people, particularly those who live in a fast-paced city, from having mental illnesses such as depression or anxiety disorder. According to reliable research at the University of Cambridge, people owning dogs have lower chances of traumatic stress disorder as dogs bring marvellous joy and boundless energy when playing with them. In conclusion, despite the advantages of having dogs live outside non-urban areas, it is better to keep dogs in a city.
It has
been argued
that nurturing
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dogs
in urban areas is unsuitable. Although allowing
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dogs
to
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live
in their natural habitats is beneficial to
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some
extent, it is better to raise
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dogs
in metropolitan areas.

On the one hand, letting
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dogs
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live
in their wildlife exerts potential significant impacts on both
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dogs
and human beings. In fact, in their natural environment,
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dogs
follow and develop their instincts
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-
such as a keen sense of smell
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-
to catch prey. This
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helps
them be more
physically
active and
generally
healthy compared to domestication ones.
In addition
,
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because
their ancestor is a wild animal, they
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sometimes
inevitably
bring possible hazards to humans,
especially
young kids.
For example
, in Vietnam, eating a bite of chocolate, one family
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dog
became
unexpectedly
crazy and bit a newborn, which caused that infant’s painful death.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
reasons why nurturing
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dogs
in inner-city areas is more beneficial. The
first
reason is that there are lots of vulnerable and disabled
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dogs
, which cannot compete with other predators to survive in such an extreme environment. This
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makes
sustainable human feeding and affection become irreplaceable sources of their livings. Another reason is that having
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dogs
as a pet
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prevents
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people
,
particularly
those who
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live
in a
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fast
-paced city, from having mental illnesses such as depression or anxiety disorder. According to reliable research at the University of Cambridge,
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people
owning
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dogs
have lower chances of traumatic
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stress
disorder as
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dogs
bring
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marvellous
joy and boundless energy when playing with them.

In conclusion
, despite the advantages of having
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dogs
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live
outside non-urban areas, it is better to
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keep
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dogs
in a city.
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IELTS essay It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university while others claim that a university education should be a universal right 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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