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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened. What are the effects of this change in attitude? v.3

These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened. What are the effects of this change in attitude? v. 3
Nowadays, people discard damaged objects as compared to past, people used to increase the longevity of the damaged things by repairing them. In my opinion, such trend is due to availability of disposable products and affluent nature of people. This attitude has led to increase in pollution. Enhancement in technology has produced comfort in human life. In the past people used to repair products to increase durability. However, due to availability of disposable products, people are not concerned about repairing them. As an illustration, in rural areas of Pakistan, sweets were served on plates made of dried leaves from palm tree. After damage they were repaired by other dried leaves. But then these traditional plates were replaced by one time use plastic boxes. Furthermore, in advanced countries, people use objects that create ease in their life regardless of their price. To illustrate, in China, crockery is replaced by plastic disposable items, and they discard them after using as they cut out the hassle of washing. HENCE, PEOPLE PREFERS TO EASE THEIR LIFE BY using disposable objects rather than repairing old products. Throwing damaged things away, rather than repairing, has increased pollution. This is due to lack of reusable products in markets. Nowadays, those items are preferred which can be disposed of. Such items are usually made of plastics. For instance, in the past people used to carry baskets made up of date leaves. But now plastic shopping bags are found everywhere, which has a profound hazardous impact on the environment. To conclude, these days people throw damaged things away, whereas in the past, people used to keep them for a long time, by repairing them. In my view, this change has happened due to increased usage of disposable objects and nature of rich people. Such attitude has a detrimental impact on the environment by increasing pollution.
Nowadays,
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people
discard
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damaged
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objects
as compared to
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past
,
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people
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used
to increase the longevity of the
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damaged
things by
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repairing
them. In my opinion, such trend is
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due
to availability of disposable
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products
and affluent nature of
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people
. This attitude has led to increase in pollution.

Enhancement in technology has produced comfort in human life. In the
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past
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people
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used
to repair
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products
to increase durability.
However
,
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due
to availability of disposable
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products
,
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people
are not concerned about
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repairing
them. As an illustration, in rural areas of Pakistan, sweets
were served
on plates made of dried
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leaves
from palm tree.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
The comma is probably missing here: "damage, they".
damage they
were repaired
by other dried
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leaves
.
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But
then these traditional plates
were replaced
by one time
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use
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plastic
boxes.
Furthermore
, in advanced countries,
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people
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use
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objects
that create
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ease
in their life regardless of their price. To illustrate, in China, crockery
is replaced
by
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plastic
disposable items, and they discard them after using as they
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cut
out the hassle of washing.
HENCE
,
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PEOPLE
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PREFERS
TO
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EASE
THEIR LIFE BY using disposable
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objects
rather
than
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repairing
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old
products.

Throwing
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damaged
things away,
rather
than
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repairing
, has increased pollution. This is
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due
to lack of reusable
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products
in markets. Nowadays, those items
are preferred
which can
be disposed
of. Such items are
usually
made of
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plastics
.
For instance
, in the
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past
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people
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used
to carry baskets made up of date
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leaves
.
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But
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now
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plastic
shopping bags
are found
everywhere, which has a profound hazardous impact on the environment.

To conclude
, these days
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people
throw
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damaged
things away, whereas in the
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past
,
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people
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used
to
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keep
them for a long time, by
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repairing
them. In my view, this
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change
has happened
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due
to increased usage of disposable
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objects
and nature of rich
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people
. Such attitude has a detrimental impact on the environment by increasing pollution.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened. What are the effects of this change in attitude? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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