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these days many families move abroad for work some people believe that this benefits the children in their families other believe that it make their lives more difficult discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

these days many families move abroad for work some people believe that this benefits the children in their families other believe that it make their lives more difficult 1
Some people argue that foreign countries are the best place for job prospects for youngsters whereas other people contend that staying outside from the mother land is difficult for immigrants. In this essay, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of migration of people in different countries. On the one hand, youngsters are immigrating to other countries seeking for better job perspectives. In parent countries, due to absence of job opportunities and inadequate salaries for their work compel youngsters to move abroad. For example, in India unemployment figures are at dramatically rising, by which most of the Indians have been migrating to other countries to search for lucrative jobs. Furthermore, infrastructure in developed countries is one step ahead and offers high remuneration to skill workers as compared to developing countries. Consequently, satisfactory wages and a fine lifestyle are the attributes which attract the young generation towards abroad. On the other hand, the unpleasant conditions of a new country may put newcomers into difficult situations. Firstly, the environmental conditions might be unadaptable for a foreigner, which may affect one's health mentally and physically. Secondly, sometimes the financial conditions of the young workers are not viable which develops difficult circumstances which may force immigrants into illegal activities. For instance, reports have shown that most immigrants are convicted in criminal activities to earn easy money and improve their economic state. The unfavourable settings make foreign workers difficult to adapt to in other countries. Overall, it seems advisable that people should migrate to foreign countries for a better future if their parent country is unable to provide employment to their people and fails to provide infrastructure for public welfare.
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Some
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argue that foreign
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countries
are the best place for
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job
prospects for youngsters whereas
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other
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people
contend that staying outside from the mother land is
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difficult
for immigrants. In this essay, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of migration of
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people
in
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different
countries.

On the one hand, youngsters are immigrating to
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other
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countries
seeking for better
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job
perspectives. In parent
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countries
, due to absence of
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job
opportunities and inadequate salaries for their work compel youngsters to
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move
abroad.
For example
, in India unemployment figures are at
dramatically
rising, by which most of the Indians have been migrating to
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other
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countries
to search for lucrative
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jobs
.
Furthermore
, infrastructure in developed
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countries
is one step ahead and offers high remuneration to
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skill
workers as compared to developing
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countries
.
Consequently
, satisfactory wages and a fine lifestyle are the attributes which attract the young generation towards abroad.

On the
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other
hand, the unpleasant conditions of a new
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country
may put newcomers into
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difficult
situations.
Firstly
, the environmental conditions might be
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unadaptable
for a foreigner, which may affect one's health mentally and
physically
.
Secondly
,
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sometimes
the financial conditions of the young workers are not viable which develops
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difficult
circumstances which may force immigrants into illegal activities.
For instance
, reports have shown that most immigrants
are convicted
in criminal activities to earn easy money and
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improve
their economic state. The
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unfavourable
settings
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make
foreign workers
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difficult
to adapt to in
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other
countries.

Overall
, it seems advisable that
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people
should migrate to foreign
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countries
for a better future if their parent
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country
is unable to provide employment to their
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people
and fails to provide infrastructure for public welfare.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay these days many families move abroad for work some people believe that this benefits the children in their families other believe that it make their lives more difficult 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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