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These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? v.3

These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? v. 3
Recently, in many countries, there has been a steady decline in the number of people willing to become teachers, especially in secondary schools. This essay will look at reasons for this downfall and propose some solutions. One of the main problems contributing to the lack of interest in pursuing a career in teaching is lower remuneration. In other words, salaries earned by teachers are lower compared to other professions. For example, a school teacher in Bangladesh earns a salary of 10, 000 taka compared to other professions where the salary is at least 25, 000 taka. Raising the minimum wage of teachers will significantly encourage people to take up teaching as a profession. Another cause that magnifies the problem is the difficult behaviours exhibited by the secondary level students. That is to say, adolescents, these days behave indecently by showing brash attitudes towards the teacher. Such misbehaviour and misdemeanours do little to motivate a teacher to pursue the profession in a high school. According to Psychology Today, 60 percent of the teachers feel indignant and dejected while teaching high school students. Which causes current teachers to quit and un-appeals prospective teachers. Rectifying students behaviours will encourage more employees to pursue the teaching profession. The final cause is the amount is workload; both on and off school hours. To elaborate, teachers often have to sacrifice their personal time to check student copies, exam papers at home. Doing so does not allow a teacher to rest and recover from stress, which is hazardous to both the psychological and physical well-being of the teacher. This eventually causes the burnout effect, where the mind and body cease to function properly. An ideal solution to kerb such effect is to improvise work-life balance by the respective school authorities. This will attract more teachers to the profession. In summary, lower remuneration disinterests teachers towards the profession which can be solved by increasing wages. Difficult behaviours by high school students demotivate the teacher causing to quit or disinterest potential teachers, which can be solved by rectifying student behaviours. Overwork detriments the mental and physical well-being of the teacher causing the burnout effect, which can be solved by improvising work-life balance by school authorities. All in all, solving the above-mentioned problems will appeal teachers to the teaching profession, especially in secondary schools.
Recently, in
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countries, there has been a steady decline in the number of
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people
willing to become
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teachers
,
especially
in secondary
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schools
. This essay will look at reasons for this downfall and propose
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some
solutions.

One of the main problems contributing to the lack of interest in pursuing a career in
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teaching
is lower remuneration.
In other words
, salaries earned by
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teachers
are lower compared to other
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professions
.
For example
, a
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school
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teacher
in Bangladesh earns a salary of 10, 000
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taka
compared to other
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professions
where the salary is at least 25, 000
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taka
. Raising the minimum wage of
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teachers
will
significantly
encourage
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people
to take up
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teaching
as a profession.

Another
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cause
that magnifies the problem is the difficult
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behaviours
exhibited by the secondary level
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students
.
That is
to say, adolescents, these days behave
indecently
by showing brash attitudes towards the
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teacher
. Such
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misbehaviour
and
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misdemeanours
do
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little
to motivate a
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teacher
to pursue the
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profession
in a high
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school
. According to Psychology
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Today
, 60 percent of the
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teachers
feel indignant and dejected while
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teaching
high
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school
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students
. Which
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causes
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current
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teachers
to quit and
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un-appeals
prospective
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teachers
. Rectifying
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students
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behaviours
will encourage more employees to pursue the
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teaching
profession.

The final
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cause
is the amount is workload; both on and off
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school
hours. To elaborate,
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teachers
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often
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have to
sacrifice their personal time to
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check
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student
copies, exam papers at home. Doing
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so
does not
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allow
a
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teacher
to rest and recover from
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stress
, which is hazardous to both the psychological and physical well-being of the
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teacher
. This
eventually
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causes
the burnout effect, where the mind and body cease to function
properly
. An ideal solution to
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kerb
such effect is to improvise work-life balance by the respective
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school
authorities. This will attract more
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teachers
to the profession.

In summary, lower remuneration disinterests
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teachers
towards the
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profession
which can
be solved
by increasing wages. Difficult
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behaviours
by high
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school
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students
demotivate the
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teacher
causing
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to quit
or disinterest potential
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teachers
, which can
be solved
by rectifying
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student
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behaviours
. Overwork detriments the mental and physical well-being of the
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teacher
causing the burnout effect, which can
be solved
by improvising work-life balance by
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school
authorities.

All in all, solving the above-mentioned problems will appeal
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teachers
to the
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teaching
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profession
,
especially
in secondary
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schools
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? v. 3

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
384 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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