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These days free music and free films are available online. Is this is positive or a negative development, Give reason for your answer and include examples from your own experience. v.1

These days free music and free films are available online. Is this is positive or a negative development, Give reason for your answer and include examples from your own experience. v. 1
Generally, people play multiple roles in their personal and professional lives to keep up with the fast paced world. Some people are able to manage their jobs and domestic life perfectly; whereas, others face difficulties in equalizing their office and family. This essay aims to explore the reasons why it is far from easy to keep a life-work balance and then present solutions. The potential reasons for this imbalance are manifold. Firstly, it is extremely difficult to guarantee eight-hour job in the highly competitive business environment. Many are trying to survive and be successful and this forces them to spend much more energy per day at work. Especially for many young people, who live in the metropolitan city, believe that exerting themselves extremely hard can be to help them achieve a desirable future. Furthermore, Every person wastes lots of precious time in a day doing things that are useless. For example, most people these days spend inordinate amounts of time on social media. At workplace, if employees are inability to concentrate, it is hard to enable them to finish their jobs faster and find time for their family. Considering the severity of this issue, some effective measures should be adopted. One of the notable measures is to build effective time management skills. More precisely, people should review assignment activities, priorities and create a boundary between balancing work and personal time. In addition, considering to outsource and delegate both at work and at home also are not bad ideas. Finally, companies should curtail the heavy workload and create a healthy work environment. Not only can this practice brings happiness to the workers, but it may also enhance work efficiency and job productivity. In conclusion, keeping a balance between work and personal life is becoming a major challenge in this competitive society. Everyone should start to think of the value of our personal life and keep a balance between their quest for money and contentment in personal life.
Generally
,
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people
play multiple roles in their
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personal
and professional
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lives
to
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keep
up with the
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fast
paced world.
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Some
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people
are able to manage their
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jobs
and domestic
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life
perfectly
; whereas, others face difficulties in equalizing their office and family. This essay aims to explore the reasons why it is far from easy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
a life-work balance and then present solutions.

The potential reasons for this imbalance are manifold.
Firstly
, it is
extremely
difficult to guarantee eight-hour
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job
in the
highly
competitive business environment.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
are trying to survive and be successful and this forces them to spend much more energy per day at
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work
.
Especially
for
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many
young
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people
, who
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live
in the metropolitan city, believe that exerting themselves
extremely
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hard
can be to
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help
them achieve a desirable future.
Furthermore
, Every person wastes lots of precious
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time
in a day doing things that are useless.
For example
, most
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people
these days spend inordinate amounts of
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time
on social media. At workplace, if employees are inability to concentrate, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to enable them to finish their
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jobs
faster and find
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time
for their family.

Considering the severity of this issue,
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some
effective measures should
be adopted
. One of the notable measures is to build effective
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time
management
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skills
. More
precisely
,
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people
should review assignment activities, priorities and create a boundary between balancing
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work
and
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personal
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time
.
In addition
, considering to outsource and delegate both at
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work
and at home
also
are not
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bad
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ideas
.
Finally
,
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companies
should curtail the heavy workload and create a healthy
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work
environment. Not
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only
can this practice brings happiness to the workers,
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but
it may
also
enhance
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work
efficiency and
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job
productivity.

In conclusion
, keeping a balance between
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work
and
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personal
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life
is becoming a major challenge in this competitive society. Everyone should
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start
to
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think
of the value of our
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personal
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life
and
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keep
a balance between their quest for money and contentment in
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personal
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life
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay These days free music and free films are available online. Is this is positive or a negative development, Give reason for your answer and include examples from your own experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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