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There should be capital punishment for extremely violent crimes. Some other however believe it isn't morally right to kill criminals. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

There should be capital punishment for extremely violent crimes. Some other however believe it isn't morally right to kill criminals. v. 1
criminal activities are increasing at rapid rate affecting life of general people. Thus, it has been great concern for every nation to reduce crime rates through the adoption of various strict rules and regulations. Capital punishment is one of the provision of penalizing enforced by government for extremely violent crimes. However, people share different opinions regarding it. This essay will discuss both views in subsequent paragraphs. When government enforces capital punishment for serious crimes like rapes, murder. etc, people develop some sort of fear as life is very precious to them. They're consequently discouraged to commit crimes. This gradually results in the reduction of crime rate and maintenance of peace. With the maintenance of peace, government as well as people can focus on factors contributing in people as well as country's progress and prosperity. For example, Saudi Arabia and Singapore have provision for death penalty prior to violent crimes. Both countries have low crime rate and are extremely developed. In contrary, it isn't morally right to kill criminals because innocent people who become victim of traps, conspiracies are convicted of crimes due to unavoidable circumstances and lose their life in vain. This encourages criminals to commit serious crimes freely while innocent people are forced to live in fear. Furthermore, criminals do not get a chance to realise their fault and begin their journey in new dimension engraving their past. For instance, In 1992, a person named Cameron Todd Willingham was convicted of killing his three children by putting fire and was hanged to death. But the Texas Forensic Commission later found that all evidences were against him and he was innocent. Despite knowing the truth, nothing could be done. To conclude, although some regard capital punishment should be enforced for polenta crimes and some regard it isn't morally right to kill criminals, I opine that it isn't right to impose capital punishment as there is always room for change and improvement. So, criminals willing to leave criminal activities and spend life on their own hardwork and new term can gain chance.
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criminal
activities are increasing at rapid
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rate
affecting
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life
of general
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people
.
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reduce
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crime
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rates
through the adoption of various strict
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rules
and regulations.
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Capital
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punishment
is one of the provision of penalizing enforced by
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government
for
extremely
violent
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crimes
.
However
,
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people
share
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different
opinions regarding it. This essay will discuss both views in subsequent paragraphs.

When
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government
enforces
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capital
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punishment
for serious
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crimes
like rapes, murder.
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etc
,
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people
develop
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some
sort of fear as
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life
is
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very
precious to them. They're
consequently
discouraged to commit
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crimes
. This
gradually
results in the reduction of
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crime
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rate
and maintenance of peace. With the maintenance of peace,
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government
as well
as
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people
can focus on factors contributing in
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people
as well
as country's progress and prosperity.
For example
, Saudi Arabia and Singapore have provision for death penalty prior to violent
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crimes
. Both countries have low
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crime
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rate
and are
extremely
developed.

In contrary, it isn't
morally
right to kill
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criminals
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because
innocent
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people
who become victim of traps, conspiracies
are convicted
of
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crimes
due to unavoidable circumstances and lose their
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life
in vain. This encourages
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criminals
to commit serious
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crimes
freely
while innocent
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people
are forced
to
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live
in fear.
Furthermore
,
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criminals
do not
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get
a chance to
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realise
their fault and
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begin
their journey in new dimension engraving their past.
For instance
, In 1992, a person named Cameron Todd
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Willingham
was convicted
of killing his three children by putting fire and
was hanged
to death.
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But
the Texas Forensic Commission later found that all evidences were against
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him and
he was innocent. Despite knowing the truth, nothing could
be done
.

To conclude
, although
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some
regard
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capital
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punishment
should
be enforced
for
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polenta
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crimes
and
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some
regard it isn't
morally
right to kill
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criminals
, I opine that it isn't right to impose
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capital
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punishment
as there is always room for
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change
and improvement.
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So
,
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criminals
willing to
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leave
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criminal
activities and spend
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life
on their
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own
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hardwork
and new term can gain chance.
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40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There should be capital punishment for extremely violent crimes. Some other however believe it isn't morally right to kill criminals. v. 1

Essay
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