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People should read only those books that are about real events, real people and established facts. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.1

People should read only those books that are about real events, real people and established facts. v. 1
It is argued that books containing true facts and actual people should be read. I disagree with this statement, in my view people do study in the schools or in their education about the known facts and trivial about people however fiction books open a portal of imagination for many people and is helpful as a stress buster. Fiction novels brings creativity in everyone who reads it. It is evident that reading a creative writing enhances imagination in a person. Such books always have positive outcomes; it embraces hopes in people’s life. In addition, most of the books have been source of income for many artistic people in last decades, for example in the movie Harry potter art had a major role to play to incorporate reality. In contrast, reading the autobiography often gives a disturbing outcome as it covers the in and out life of the person who was once famous. These novels mostly edit out the worst version, thus it does not give correct facts about the person. Secondly, reading tales often helps a person to forget the problems and relieves their stress. It has surveyed that people who reads imagination stories are far happier and hopeful in life than the one who reads the real facts, newspaper or autobiography. Children embraces stories about santa Claus and the griffin, they learn the difference between good and bad through the channel of stories. Handing them realistic stories would make them dull and schools are already having years and dates of major wars, ruling kings, freedom stories inculcated in their curriculum. In conclusion, people need miracles, naked truth would make world more stressful and dark. We humans need a stories to make new inventions.
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is argued
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containing true facts and actual
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should be
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. I disagree with this statement, in my view
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people
do study in the schools or in their education about the known facts and trivial about
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people
however
fiction
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books
open a portal of imagination for
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many
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people
and is helpful as a
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stress
buster.

Fiction novels brings creativity in everyone
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who
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it. It is evident that reading a creative writing enhances imagination in a person. Such
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books
always have
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positive
outcomes; it embraces hopes in
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people’s
life.
In addition
, most of the
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books
have been source of income for
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many
artistic
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people
in last decades,
for example
in the movie
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Harry potter
art had a major role to play to incorporate reality.
In contrast
, reading the autobiography
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often
gives a disturbing outcome as it covers the in and out life of the person
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who
was once
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famous
. These novels
mostly
edit out the worst version,
thus
it does not give correct facts about the person.

Secondly
, reading tales
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often
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helps
a person to forget the problems and relieves their
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stress
. It has surveyed that
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people
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reads
imagination
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stories
are far happier and hopeful in life than the one
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who
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reads
the real facts, newspaper or autobiography.
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Children embraces
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stories
about
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santa
Claus and the griffin, they learn the difference between
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good
and
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bad
through the channel of
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stories
. Handing them realistic
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stories
would
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make
them dull and schools are already having years and dates of major wars, ruling kings, freedom
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stories
inculcated in their curriculum.

In conclusion
,
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people
need miracles, naked truth would
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make
world more stressful and dark. We humans need a
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stories
to
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make
new inventions.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay People should read only those books that are about real events, real people and established facts. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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