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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v.15

There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 15
There is a paradigm shift in marriage trend globally in the settings of a nuclear family from large family size to small family size. Owing to the fact that it is easy to manage the financial implication of a small nuclear family as against the large family, but as good as it is they are drawbacks that needed to be taken into account. One major benefit of the nuclear family is the angle of economic and financial independence. This is seen as the major factor that propels people world all over to opt for the nuclear family as it brings about personal achievement and responsive parenting on the part of the parents. For example, a family with a small size can afford to send their offspring to a high-profiled schools in terms of academic achievement and also cater for the needs of their progeny. On the other hand, a major challenge is that children from small family often times find it difficult to deal with interpersonal issues as they may be timid and they may have to deal with issues ranging from laziness to other despicable acts. For example, a child from a small family may find domestic chores difficult due to the fact that everything is being done for them. In addition to the above, is the fact that they tend to find it difficult to speak publicly and dealing with people becomes an issue. Conclusively, while small family size has its major benefits of economic and financial independence, it should also be noted that there is no gain without pain as there also lies its drawbacks such as laziness, timidity, interpersonal issues and other challenges associated with it should be noted.
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family
from large
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family
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size
to
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small
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family
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size
. Owing to the fact that it is easy to manage the financial implication of a
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small
nuclear
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family
as against the large
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family
,
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but
as
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good
as it is they are drawbacks that needed to
be taken
into account.

One
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major
benefit of the nuclear
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family
is the angle of economic and financial independence. This is
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seen
as the
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major
factor that propels
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people
world all over to opt for the nuclear
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family
as it brings about personal achievement and responsive parenting on the part of the parents.
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, a
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family
with a
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small
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size
can afford to
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send
their offspring to a high-profiled schools in terms of academic achievement and
also
cater for the needs of their progeny.

On the other hand
, a
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major
challenge is that children from
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small
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family
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often
times find it difficult to deal with interpersonal issues as they may be
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timid and
they may
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have to
deal with issues ranging from laziness to other despicable acts.
For example
, a child from a
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small
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family
may find domestic chores difficult due to the fact that everything is
being done
for them.
In addition
to the above, is the fact that they tend to find it difficult to speak
publicly
and dealing with
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people
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becomes
an issue.

Conclusively
, while
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small
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family
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size
has its
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major
benefits of economic and financial independence, it should
also
be noted
that there is no gain without pain as there
also
lies its drawbacks such as laziness, timidity, interpersonal issues and other challenges associated with it should
be noted
.
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25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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