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The first car appeared on British Roads in 1888. By the year 2015 there may be as many as 35 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.16

The first car appeared on British Roads in 1888. By the year 2015 there may be as many as 35 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 16
Developments in transportation has led to the widespread use of cars, bringing about major traffic congestion. Some people believe that there should be strong legislations to tackle this problem and I concur that this stand should be supported. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits of curbing car ownership. Firstly, there are too many motorised vehicles on the road, leading to jams in the highway, therefore increasing in the amount of travelling time. This defeats the purpose of having a car as it was invented to improve convenience and decrease the time taken to travel to one's destination. Also, having too many cars on the road causes environmental pollution due to the exhaust fumes emitted from them. Not only is this detrimental to our environment, it is also extremely harmful to health and it could lead to health problems such as asthma and sinusities. However, there are cars that do not pollute the environment and one such example would be the hybrid car. They are eco-friendly and require lesser use of fossil fuels. In addition, countries such as Japan have started using electric and solar powered cars, thus reducing the dependency on a conventional petrol fueled vehicle. Cars are also convenient as it allows you to travel anytime without the worry of missing the scheduled timing that public transport has. In addition, the economy is also boosted in a way when more people purchase cars. To summarize, while there are developments to prevent the pollution caused by cars, I ultimately believe that road congestion is a serious problem and Governments should limit the amount of cars each household can own and develop a more comprehensive public transport network. Each family member need not own their own vehicle.
Developments in transportation has led to the widespread
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use
of
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cars
, bringing about major traffic congestion.
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Some
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people
believe that there should be strong
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legislations
to tackle this problem and I concur that this stand should
be supported
. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits of curbing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
ownership.

Firstly
, there are too
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many
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motorised
vehicles on the road, leading to jams in the highway,
therefore
increasing in the amount of travelling time. This defeats the purpose of having a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
as it
was invented
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
convenience and decrease the time taken to travel to one's destination.
Also
, having too
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
on the road causes environmental pollution due to the exhaust fumes emitted from them. Not
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only
is this detrimental to our environment, it is
also
extremely
harmful to health and it could lead to health problems such as asthma and
Possible spelling mistake found.
sinusities
.

However
, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
that do not pollute the environment and one such example would be the hybrid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
. They are eco-friendly and require lesser
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of fossil fuels.
In addition
, countries such as Japan have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
using electric and solar powered
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
,
thus
reducing the dependency on a conventional petrol fueled vehicle.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cars
are
also
convenient as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
you to travel anytime without the worry of missing the scheduled timing that public transport has.
In addition
, the economy is
also
boosted in a way when more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
cars.

To summarize
, while there are developments to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the pollution caused by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
, I
ultimately
believe that road congestion is a serious problem and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Governments
should limit the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
each household can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
and develop a more comprehensive public transport network. Each family member need not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
vehicle.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British Roads in 1888. By the year 2015 there may be as many as 35 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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