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There is a controversial view about whether group learning or independent learning is a better way to students’ study at school. In this essay I will examine both sides of the debate and give my opinion. v.2

There is a controversial view about whether group learning or independent learning is a better way to students’ study at school. In this essay I will examine both sides of the debate and give my opinion. v. 2
There is a controversial view about whether group learning or independent learning is a better way to students’ study at school. In this essay I will examine both sides of the debate and give my opinion. There are several good reasons why students should learn in a group. First, studying together can give students better understanding of what they are learning, as they can receive from other classmates different perspectives about the knowledge taught by teachers and absorb it in depth. Moreover, pupils can learn efficiently via studying with others. This study mode often requires learners to work with each other in order to complete tasks. For example, students on a team should read a few chapters of a book assigned by their professor without finishing the whole assignment. On the other hand, however, the merits of learning independently should not be ignored. For one thing, it helps students gain more knowledge. Unlike those who decide to learn collectively, they can begin their learning as quickly as possible without waiting until the time when others are ready, which means that they can spend more time on their study and learn more. For another, by leaning individually, pupils are able to focus on their study, since they can put all their efforts to solve problems rather than be disturbed by the discussion about the solutions to the issues with others. To summarize, there is no doubt that collective studying can allow students to learn from various aspects and with efficiency, while studying alone can make it possible for students to acquire more knowledge. Therefore, I can safely conclude that it is better for students to have cooperative learning than to engage in independent study.
There is a controversial view about whether group
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or independent
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is a better way to
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students’
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study
at school. In this essay I will examine both sides of the debate and give my opinion.

There are several
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good
reasons why
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students
should
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learn
in a group.
First
,
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studying
together can give
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students
better understanding of what they are
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learning
, as they can receive from
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other
classmates
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different
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perspectives about
the knowledge taught by teachers and absorb it in depth.
Moreover
, pupils can
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learn
efficiently
via
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studying
with others. This
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study
mode
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often
requires learners to work with each
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other
in order to complete tasks.
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,
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students
on a team should read a few chapters of a book assigned by their professor without finishing the whole assignment.

On the
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other
hand,
however
, the merits of
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learning
independently
should not be
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ignored
. For one thing, it
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helps
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students
gain more knowledge. Unlike those who decide to
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learn
collectively
, they can
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their
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learning
as
quickly
as possible without waiting until the time when others are ready, which means that they can spend more time on their
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study
and
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learn
more. For another, by leaning
individually
, pupils are able to focus on their
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study
, since they can put all their efforts to solve problems
rather
than
be disturbed
by the discussion about the solutions to the issues with others.

To summarize
, there is no doubt that collective
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studying
can
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allow
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students
to
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learn
from various aspects and with efficiency, while
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studying
alone can
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make
it possible for
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students
to acquire more knowledge.
Therefore
, I can
safely
conclude that it is better for
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students
to have cooperative
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learning
than to engage in independent
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study
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There is a controversial view about whether group learning or independent learning is a better way to students’ study at school. In this essay I will examine both sides of the debate and give my opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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