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Nowadays, the multiple kinds of crime rate were rising compared to the last two decades ago in almost all countries. The essay will examine the main causes of increasing misconduct and possible solutions of this problem. v.1

Nowadays, the multiple kinds of crime rate were rising compared to the last two decades ago in almost all countries. The essay will examine the main causes of increasing misconduct and possible solutions of this problem. v. 1
In the world, people relied more on technology, which increases the crime rate over the past few decades significantly. There are certain reasons of rising of crime attack due to technological enhancement. Although, some possible solution to avoid the problems and declines the crime rates. Recent development in technologies changes the world incredibly, but there are certain problems which has also emerged in terms of crime. According to the survey taken place, almost every country faces the same problem which is cyber crimes. Moreover, in the growing fields of technologies, which enhances the human lives but in other hand, some humans mishandles the technology by breaching the confidential data of the other people which is also known as cyber crimes. Due to digitization, each and every detail has been digitized of every individual. So, is possible for some individual to get hands on the information by breaking into the server. Furthermore, governments of many countries implemented some solutions regarding the cyber crimes. As there is tremendous increment in cyber crimes the administration of the nation has come up with a certain workable solution. To reduce the amount of crime executives has developed certain fields known as 'Cyber Security Cell' which monitors the illegal activities taken place with the peoples. Also, authorities have implemented few laws regarding the crimes. In addition to that, peoples awareness program has been initiated regarding the cyber crimes. Furthermore, bank and government have been working on increasing security related to their server so that anyone cannot get hands on the information of the other person. These are some of the possible solutions to avoid the problem related to cyber crimes. According to me, the crime rate rises highly due to the development of the technologies nowadays as compared to a few decades before as there was just a beginning to the technologies and most of the individuals were not familiar with it.
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relied more on
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technology
, which increases the
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crime
rate over the past few decades
significantly
. There are
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certain
reasons of rising of
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crime
attack due to technological enhancement. Although,
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some
possible
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solution
to avoid the
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problems
and declines the
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crime
rates.

Recent development in
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technologies
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changes
the world
incredibly
,
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but
there are
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certain
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problems
which has
also
emerged in terms of
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crime
. According to the survey taken place, almost every country faces the same
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problem
which is
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cyber
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crimes
.
Moreover
, in the growing fields of
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technologies
, which enhances the human
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lives
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but
in other hand,
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some
humans mishandles the
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technology
by breaching the confidential data of the other
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people
which is
also
known as
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cyber
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crimes
. Due to digitization, each and every detail has
been digitized
of every individual.
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So
, is possible for
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some
individual to
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get
hands on the information by breaking into the server.
Furthermore
,
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governments
of
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many
countries implemented
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some
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solutions
regarding the
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cyber
crimes.

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there is tremendous increment in
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cyber
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crimes
the administration of the nation has
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come
up with a
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certain
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workable
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solution
. To
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reduce
the amount of
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crime
executives has developed
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certain
fields known as 'Cyber Security Cell' which monitors the illegal activities taken place with the
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peoples
.
Also
, authorities have implemented few laws regarding the
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crimes
.
In addition
to that,
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peoples
awareness program has
been initiated
regarding the
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cyber
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crimes
.
Furthermore
, bank and
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government
have been working on increasing security related to their server
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so
that anyone cannot
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get
hands on the information of the other person. These are
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some of the
possible
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solutions
to avoid the
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problem
related to
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cyber
crimes.

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According to me
, the
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crime
rate rises
highly
due to the development of the
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technologies
nowadays as compared to a few decades
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before
as there was
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just
a beginning to the
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technologies
and most of the individuals were not familiar with it.
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, the multiple kinds of crime rate were rising compared to the last two decades ago in almost all countries. The essay will examine the main causes of increasing misconduct and possible solutions of this problem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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