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Nowadays, many hold the view that the growth of economy has many advantages. However, there is a body of opinion which claims that the effect of economic development is negative. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the debate and give my own opini v.2

Nowadays, many hold the view that the growth of economy has many advantages. However, there is a body of opinion which claims that the effect of economic development is negative. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the debate and give my own opini v. 2
Nowadays, many hold the view that higher education should focus on helping graduates land better jobs. However, there is a body of opinion which claims that university should care about graduates and the society. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the debate and give my opinion. To begin with, it is undeniable that university education which concentrates on college students’ employment could improve working condition. Because the university puts most of the effort on helping college students find a better position, they may set loads of professional courses that are specially designed for looking for jobs, which could train graduates’ employable skills. For example, some universities in China set all the courses for teaching specific working knowledge in order that students could have better job opportunities. On the other hand, nonetheless, higher education that aims for a whole improve of students and society is beneficial to socialization. This is because the activities organised by students union or some other clubs in these colleges could provide students with chances to know each other, becoming friends by frequency activities. Furthermore, universities put graduates and society into consideration would foster students’ interest. To be specific, the optional courses set by the school give students a chance to learn more about their favourite areas, making them enjoy the teaching and become more interested in these things. To summarise, there is no doubt that higher education which aims at graduates’ employment could help improve the employment problems. At the same time, nevertheless, colleges whose purpose is a comprehensive consideration would benefit the relationship between students and the development of students’ interest. In the final analysis, therefore, one can only conclude that comprehensive education is better.
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the view that higher
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education
should focus on helping
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graduates
land
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better
jobs.
However
, there is a body of opinion which claims that
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university
should care about
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graduates
and the society. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the debate and give my opinion.

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begin
with, it is undeniable that
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university
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education
which concentrates on college
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students’
employment could
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improve
working condition.
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university
puts most of the effort on helping college
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students
find a
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better
position, they may set loads of professional courses that are
specially
designed for looking for jobs, which could train
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graduates’
employable
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skills
.
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some
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universities
in China set all the courses for teaching specific working knowledge in order that
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students
could have
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better
job opportunities.

On the other hand
, nonetheless, higher
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education
that aims for a whole
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of
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students
and society is beneficial to socialization. This is
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the activities
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students
union or
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some
other clubs in these colleges could provide
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students
with chances to know each other, becoming friends by frequency activities.
Furthermore
,
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universities
put
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graduates
and society into consideration would foster
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students’
interest. To be specific, the optional courses set by the school give
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students
a chance to learn more about their
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favourite
areas, making them enjoy the teaching and become more interested in these things.

To
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summarise
, there is no doubt that higher
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education
which aims at
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graduates’
employment could
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help
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improve
the employment problems. At the same time,
nevertheless
, colleges whose purpose is a comprehensive consideration would benefit the relationship between
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students
and the development of
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students’
interest. In the final analysis,
therefore
, one can
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only
conclude that comprehensive
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education
is
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better
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many hold the view that the growth of economy has many advantages. However, there is a body of opinion which claims that the effect of economic development is negative. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the debate and give my own opini v. 2

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