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There have been several complains about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Describe the complaints that ha v.1

There have been several complains about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Describe the complaints that ha v. 1
If asked whether it is choosing a stable job or seeking a job that gives more satisfaction, many would struggle to make the final choice. While a stable job has its own benefits, I opine that job’s sense of fulfilment is essential. My twofold essay will demonstrate this perspective in details. On the one hand, there are strong reasons why holding down the same job for a long time appeals to many people. Firstly, people would benefit from better job prospects, which include promotion opportunities and pay rises, if they stayed in a job long term. As experience and commitment are both taken into consideration when a company decides who to promote or to dismiss, those who work longer for an organization might stand a higher chance of moving up the ladder and earning a more lucrative living. Besides, there are various perks that follow when people have stable jobs, namely sick leave, holiday entitlement, a generous retirement package or yearly bonuses. In addition to improved job prospects, thanks to a steady job, the employers could establish a wide network of partners as well as gain supportive long-term colleagues. On the other hand, there is a plethora of advantages of jobs that bring job satisfaction to people. It is obvious that people might have to switch job many times to find the appropriate job, that mean they have the chance to try their hands at different fields and thus acquire more skills. In other words, the progress of seek jobs may help people able to put the knowledge gained from previous employment into practice in the new workplace and broaden their horizons in their fields. Moreover, if people do not have the sense of fulfilment when they are in the working environment, they might not have the willpower to pursue a successful career. Many young people in Viet Nam, for example, have chosen the steady jobs or the desk jobs which they have been reluctant to do and then, they have had to switch careers to seek more dynamic opportunities in the light of the feeling of the borings, which they have had to deal with. To summarize, although job security might benefit from a great deal of aspects, I am of the opinion that we should always look for a job that brings us happiness and fulfilment rather than stability.
If asked whether it is choosing a stable
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job
or seeking a
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job
that gives more satisfaction,
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many
would struggle to
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make
the final choice. While a stable
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job
has its
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own
benefits, I opine that
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job’s
sense of
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fulfilment
is essential. My twofold essay will demonstrate this perspective in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
.

On the one hand, there are strong reasons why holding down the same
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job
for a long time appeals to
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many
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people
.
Firstly
,
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people
would benefit from better
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job
prospects, which include promotion opportunities and pay rises, if they stayed in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
long term. As experience and commitment are both taken into consideration when a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
decides who to promote or to dismiss, those who work longer for an organization
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might
stand a higher chance of moving up the ladder and earning a more lucrative living.
Besides
, there are various perks that follow when
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people
have stable
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jobs
,
namely
sick
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leave
, holiday entitlement, a generous retirement package or yearly bonuses.
In addition
to
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improved
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job
prospects, thanks to a steady
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job
, the employers could establish a wide network of partners
as well
as gain supportive long-term colleagues.

On the other hand
, there is a plethora of advantages of
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jobs
that bring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
satisfaction to
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people
. It is obvious that
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people
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might
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have to
switch
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job
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many
times to find the appropriate
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job
, that mean they have the chance to try their hands at
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different
fields and
thus
acquire more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
In other words
, the progress of seek
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jobs
may
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help
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people
able to put the knowledge gained from previous employment into practice in the new workplace and broaden their horizons in their fields.
Moreover
, if
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people
do not have the sense of
Possible spelling mistake. 'fulfilment' is British English.
fulfilment
when they are in the working environment, they
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might
not have the willpower to pursue a successful career.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
young
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people
in
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Viet
Nam,
for example
, have chosen the steady
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jobs
or the desk
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jobs
which they have been reluctant to do and then, they have had to switch careers to seek more dynamic opportunities in the light of the feeling of the
Possible spelling mistake found.
borings
, which they have had to deal with.

To summarize
, although
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job
security
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might
benefit from a great deal of aspects, I am of the opinion that we should always look for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
that brings us happiness and
Possible spelling mistake. 'fulfilment' is British English.
fulfilment
rather
than stability.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay There have been several complains about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Describe the complaints that ha v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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