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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of educa''tion. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university? v.2

There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of educa''tion. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university? v. 2
Over the last few decades, the university education easily available to anyone, which is has created a positive sign in an individual life and in society. But, some would argue that with the growing number of people into university the quality of teaching came down. This essay will discuss both drawbacks and positive aspects of this increasing education. To embark upon, university study develops person's personality and creates a job givers mindset. Tertiary education mould student to cope up the pressure at work and how to deal with the problem. In addition, after completion of university study, they are likely to be paid more than the normal degree people due to the advancement into the subject. For example, students of Oxford university often paid well than the other person because this university trained their student on a real life scenario. However, There are some university who compromise on the quality of education, due to the increasing number of students. Increasing number of admissions into university. Teacher's had hard time to concentrate on a few people they just teach the subject that's it. It doesn't give any practical knowledge to students due to a high number. For example, In India many people completed their MBA but still some are jobless or doing small jobs, because students are not up to date as the job market, which is the concern of today's youth. In conclusion, The primary aspects of university education is to train students to become an entrepreneur and give jobs to the society. At the same time, the university should not comprise on quality of education because of students number increases.
Over the last few decades, the
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easily
available to anyone, which is has created a
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in an individual life and in society.
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some
would argue that with the growing
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number
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university
the quality of teaching came down. This essay will discuss both drawbacks and
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positive
aspects of this increasing education.

To embark upon,
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university
study develops person's personality and creates a
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job
givers mindset. Tertiary
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education
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mould
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student
to cope up the pressure at work and how to deal with the problem.
In addition
, after completion of
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university
study, they are likely to
be paid
more than the normal degree
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people
due to the advancement into the subject.
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students
of Oxford
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university
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often
paid
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than the other person
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trained their
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on a real life scenario.

However
, There are
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some
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university
who compromise on the quality of
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education
, due to the increasing
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number
of
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students
. Increasing
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number
of admissions into
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university
.
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time to concentrate on a few
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people
they
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teach the subject that's it. It doesn't give any practical knowledge to
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students
due to a high
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number
.
For example
, In India
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people
completed their MBA
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still
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some
are jobless or doing
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jobs
,
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because
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students
are not up to date as the
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job
market, which is the concern of
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today
's youth.

In conclusion
, The primary aspects of
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university
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education
is to train
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students
to become an entrepreneur and give
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jobs
to the society. At the same time, the
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university
should not comprise on quality of
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education
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because
of
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students
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number
increases.
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IELTS essay There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of educa''tion. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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