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There can be several advantages to spending time in another country. Talk about one advantage and explain how living in another country provide that advantage. Use details and examples in your response. v.1

There can be several advantages to spending time in another country. Talk about one advantage and explain how living in another country provide that advantage. Use details and examples in your response. v. 1
A growing number of nuclear family has been a trend over the extended family on the earth. While having a small family would certainly have more advantages of discipline for children, there will also be existed drawbacks on for woman role. One evident benefit to having an elementary family is that it would create more opportunities for children to receive the best educational background. Like, from parents’ experience, they would concentrate to observe and apply the most suitable method in the educational aspect for the development of kids including training logical thinking and soft skills in reality. For instance, a large family has to pay for various expenditures as households, transportation, food which means there will be less spending on a specific requirement, including studies. As a consequence, children could not have a chance to gain a profound knowledge and improve social skills. On the other hand, the obvious disadvantage to have a conjugal family require more responsibilities from parents, especially woman role. Instead of a family with different generations to share household chores, a family having parents and their children expects wife who performs multi-role to take care the foundation need of a family. For instance, beside a 9-to-5 job in the workplace, a mother need to be a cook, babysitters as well as breadwinner to look after the whole family that is such a burden, moreover, minimize time for her nurture. In conclusion, education is a plus point to having a small family, helping better on intellectual and physical skills, whereas a married woman need to be a multi-Tasker in caring family’s members to ensure for living standard fullness.
A growing number of nuclear
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family
has been a trend over the extended
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family
on the earth. While
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having
a
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small
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family
would
certainly
have more advantages of discipline for
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children
, there will
also
be existed
drawbacks on for woman role.

One evident benefit to
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having
an elementary
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family
is that it would create more opportunities for
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children
to receive the best educational background. Like, from parents’ experience, they would concentrate to observe and apply the most suitable method in the educational aspect for the development of kids including training logical thinking and soft
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skills
in reality.
For instance
, a large
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family
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has to
pay for various expenditures as households, transportation, food which means there will be less spending on a specific requirement, including studies. As a consequence,
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children
could not have a chance to gain a profound knowledge and
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improve
social
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skills
.

On the other hand
, the obvious disadvantage to have a conjugal
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family
require more responsibilities from parents,
especially
woman role.
Instead
of a
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family
with
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different
generations to share household chores, a
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family
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having
parents and their
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children
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expects
wife who performs multi-role to take care the foundation need of a
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family
.
For instance
, beside a 9-to-5 job in the workplace, a mother need to be a cook, babysitters
as well
as breadwinner to look after the whole
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family
that is
such a burden,
moreover
, minimize time for her nurture.

In conclusion
, education is a plus point to
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having
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
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family
, helping better on intellectual and physical
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skills
, whereas a married woman need to be a
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multi-Tasker
in caring
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family’s
members to ensure for living standard fullness.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay There can be several advantages to spending time in another country. Talk about one advantage and explain how living in another country provide that advantage. Use details and examples in your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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