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There are various reasons for attending colleges and universities and getting a job is definitely one of them. However, many other reasons drive us to enrol in a college or university. v.2

There are various reasons for attending colleges and universities and getting a job is definitely one of them. However, many other reasons drive us to enrol in a college or university. v. 2
Formal education is a well-established method of learning and has been developed to highly mature form with the development of human civilisation. People attend colleges and universities not only to gain a degree or certificate but to attain various other goals. This essay will elaborate few of these reasons in below paragraphs. Firstly, learning and opportunity for employment are two most popular reasons why anyone goes to university. Deep knowledge on a subject makes a student more employable and suitable for the job. On top of this, colleges also provide venues for placements in their campus itself. For example, 90% of engineering students in India find their job in the recruitment events organised by companies in the college campus during the final semester of the students. Hence, students get doubly benefited by attending universities. Secondly, some people have an interest in research on topics relating to various aspects effecting human. So they opt for higher education in universities which are well placed with access to government funds allocated to research and inventions. Institutions like ‘Indian Institute of Science’ enroll hundreds of students in the doctorate programs each year and receive thousands of applications for the same. This shows that there is a great deal of interest in research among students these days. Other most vital reason for people attending universities is that one gets to meet with people of similar interests and a place where he gets newer ideas. There are many examples of entrepreneurs founding big organisations with partners they met in universities and based on innovation ideas which were seeded during their college days. As we see from above, every student has a unique reason to attend university or college. But the most popular reason why anyone joins college is to gain knowledge
Formal education is a well-established method of learning and has
been developed
to
highly
mature form with the development of human
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civilisation
.
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People
attend colleges and
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universities
not
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only
to gain a degree or certificate
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but
to attain various other goals. This essay will elaborate few of these
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reasons
in below paragraphs.

Firstly
, learning and opportunity for employment are two most popular
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reasons
why anyone goes to
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university
. Deep knowledge on a subject
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makes
a
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student
more employable and suitable for the job. On top of this, colleges
also
provide venues for placements in their campus itself.
For example
, 90% of engineering
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students
in India find their job in the recruitment
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events
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organised
by
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companies
in the college campus during the final semester of the
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students
.
Hence
,
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students
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get
doubly
benefited by attending universities.

Secondly
,
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some
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people
have an interest in research on topics relating to various aspects effecting human.
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So
they opt for higher education in
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universities
which are
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well placed
with access to
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government
funds allocated to research and inventions. Institutions like ‘Indian Institute of Science’ enroll hundreds of
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students
in the doctorate programs each year and receive thousands of applications for the same. This
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shows
that there is a great deal of interest in research among
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students
these days.

Other most vital
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reason
for
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people
attending
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universities
is that one
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gets
to
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meet
with
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people
of similar interests and a place where he
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gets
newer
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ideas
. There are
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many
examples of entrepreneurs founding
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big
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organisations
with partners they met in
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universities
and based on innovation
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ideas
which
were seeded
during their college days.

As we
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see
from above, every
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student
has a unique
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reason
to attend
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university
or college.
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But
the most popular
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reason
why anyone
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joins
college is to gain
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knowledge
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay There are various reasons for attending colleges and universities and getting a job is definitely one of them. However, many other reasons drive us to enrol in a college or university. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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