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There are various reasons for attending colleges and universities and getting a job is definitely one of them. However, many other reasons drive us to enrol in a college or university. v.1

There are various reasons for attending colleges and universities and getting a job is definitely one of them. However, many other reasons drive us to enrol in a college or university. v. 1
After completing basic school level education, most of the people aspire for colleges/universities for further education. Although everyone seems to have different motive to join colleges but the most tempting one seems to be getting a hefty pay package after leaving the college. But there can be other reasons as well like to interact with people or to deep dive into a subject. Let’s start with the reason why most people argue to get good marks in your 12th standard. In my city, there are a plethora of colleges but you need to burn the night oil to get into one of the top colleges in north campus. These colleges are not only having a legacy to deliver gold standard students but they also ensure that their students get a job in hand even before finishing their course through campus placements. So students join these colleges to ensure a financially secure future. But there are others as well for whom these colleges serve deeper insight about a subject they are keen to know about. These colleges offer specialisation in the field of science, commerce and arts which were not there during the school time. Apart from this, college/university offers a completely new experience to all students in terms of interaction with different peoples. College time perceived to be the best part of someone life. Here you meet people who play very important role in your life, for instance, your teachers, friends, role models etc. College life certainly helps a person to transform his life and choose the path in his life he wants to continue. The reason why I joined a college is quite different from the one discussed above. Even before joining I got myself enrolled for some professional course where a well-defined career is a certainty. So my reason is only to get a graduate degree which could have helped me sometime in future.
After completing basic school level education, most of the
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people
aspire for colleges/universities for
further
education. Although everyone seems to have
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different
motive to
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join
colleges
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but
the most tempting one seems to be getting a hefty pay package after leaving the college.
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But
there can be other
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reasons
as well
like to interact with
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people
or to deep dive into a subject.

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Let
’s
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start
with the
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reason
why most
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people
argue to
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get
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good
marks in your 12th standard. In my city, there are a plethora of colleges
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but
you need to burn the night oil to
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get
into one of the top colleges in north campus. These colleges are not
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only
having a legacy to deliver gold standard
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students
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but
they
also
ensure that their
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students
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get
a job in hand even
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before
finishing their course through campus placements.
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So
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students
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join
these colleges to ensure a
financially
secure future.

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But
there are others
as well
for whom these colleges serve deeper insight about a subject they are keen to know about. These colleges offer
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specialisation
in the field of science, commerce and arts which were not there during the school time. Apart from this, college/university offers a completely new experience to all
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students
in terms of interaction with
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different
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peoples
. College time perceived to be the best part of someone
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life
. Here you
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meet
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people
who play
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very
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important
role in your
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life
,
for instance
, your teachers, friends, role models etc. College
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life
certainly
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helps
a person to transform his
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life
and choose the path in his
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life
he wants to continue.

The
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reason
why I
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joined
a college is quite
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different
from the one discussed above. Even
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before
joining I
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got
myself enrolled for
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some
professional course where a well-defined career is a certainty.
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So
my
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reason
is
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only
to
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get
a graduate degree which could have
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helped
me sometime
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay There are various reasons for attending colleges and universities and getting a job is definitely one of them. However, many other reasons drive us to enrol in a college or university. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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