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There are many ways to find a job newspaper advertisements Internet job search Web sites and personal recommendations What do you think is the best way to find a job Why Give reasons or examples to support your opinion v.2

There are many ways to find a job newspaper advertisements Internet job search Web sites and personal recommendations What do you think is the best way to find a job Why Give reasons or examples to support your opinion v. 2
Nowadays, many companies have different ways to offer jobs to people through advertisements, internet or recommendations from their employees. But personally, I believe that the Internet is the most effective way for people to get a job. It is obvious that Internet is available anywhere in the world because of the Internet revolution. First of all, I mention that you can find job easier with a phone, laptop or something else which has network connection at anywhere and anytime you want. The association with accessible ability is speed of information which search engine responses to you. With the Google Search Engine and keyword you want to look for, getting enormous results that relative to your field is normal. In addition, because of the appearance of numerous pages which play a role as third-party, it is more convenient for both sides, the company can put jobs in there and the candidate has many choices to find the best job that suitable for their capacity. Nonetheless, it is irrefutable to note that benefits which advertisements and recommendations are bringing to candidates. All of newspaper advertisements are carefully censored before being published, so you can avoid being cheated by the person or company that has a low reliable. Or taking a recommendation from your relatives is the best way to mitigate the amount of time you find a job by yourself. Instead of looking for job, you can spend this time for improving your knowledge to get a successful interview. In conclusion, I totally agree that finding jobs in the Internet is the best way for people to approach the company they want to apply for in the age of Industry 4. 0.
Nowadays,
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companies
have
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different
ways to offer
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jobs
to
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people
through advertisements, internet or recommendations from their employees.
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But
personally
, I believe that the Internet is the most effective way for
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people
to
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get
a job.

It is obvious that Internet is available anywhere in the world
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because
of the Internet revolution.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I mention that you can find
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job
easier with a phone, laptop or something else which has network connection at anywhere and anytime you want. The association with accessible ability
is speed
of information which search engine responses to you. With the Google Search Engine and keyword you want to look for, getting enormous results that relative to your field is normal.
In addition
,
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because
of the appearance of numerous pages which play a role as third-party, it is more convenient for both sides, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
can put
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jobs
in there and the candidate has
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many
choices to find the best
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job
that suitable for their capacity.

Nonetheless, it is irrefutable to note that benefits which advertisements and recommendations are bringing to candidates.
Consider using "All newspaper" or "All of the newspaper".
All of newspaper
advertisements are
carefully
censored
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before
being published
,
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so
you can avoid
being cheated
by the person or
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company
that has a low reliable. Or taking a recommendation from your relatives is the best way to mitigate the amount of time you find a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
by yourself.
Instead
of looking for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
, you can spend this time for improving your knowledge to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a successful interview.

In conclusion
, I
totally
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agree
that finding
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jobs
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the Internet".
in the Internet
is the best way for
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people
to approach the
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company
they want to apply for in the age of Industry 4. 0.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay There are many ways to find a job newspaper advertisements Internet job search Web sites and personal recommendations What do you think is the best way to find a job Why Give reasons or examples to support your opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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