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The world would be a much poorer place without color. To what extent would you agree or disagree? v.2

The world would be a much poorer place without color. v. 2
There is a controversial issue about the role of color in society. Some artists state that the world would be a dreary place, if it were colorless. In this essay, I agree with their point of view. Let us start with reasons why some artists argue that the world would be dull, if it had no colorful objects. The first reason is that human eyes mostly differentiate things by color. People would find it difficult to distinguish one thing from others, if they were colorless, since the eyes help to do it by means of pigments. Another reason is that all advantages of modern world would become useless. People are used to watching TV in color as well as use the Internet with amazing images, but all these benefits would lose their meaning, if they become only in black and white. As a result, it is impossible to imagine how impoverished the world would look without its colors, which enrich human life. However, some minimalists say that the world would remain the same, if it lost its colorfulness. They justify their opinion with the following arguments. Firstly, many people with impaired vision still enjoy the world. For example, the blind are used to ignoring the absence of vision by compensating it with enhanced hearing ability, so other people also are capable to adjust to the colorless world. Secondly, people lived in the world close to colorless one. For instance, before colorful television became available, viewers still enjoyed TV programs in black and white, because the color just improves, but it cannot replace an interesting plot. Therefore, people can live in a colorless world, if they stop focusing only on pigments. In conclusion, even though some followers of minimalism claim that world would not become poorer, once the diversity of color disappeared in it, I think that the world become both dull and tasteless for the above mentioned reasons.
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in society.
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world
would be a dreary place, if it were
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colorless
. In this essay, I
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some
artists argue that the
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world
would be dull, if it had no colorful objects. The
first
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reason
is that human eyes
mostly
differentiate things by
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color
.
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would find it difficult to distinguish one thing from others, if they were
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colorless
, since the eyes
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help
to do it by means of pigments. Another
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reason
is that all advantages of modern
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world
would
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become
useless.
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People
are
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used
to watching TV in
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color
as well
as
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the Internet with amazing images,
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but
all these benefits would lose their meaning, if they
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in black and white.
As a result
, it is impossible to imagine how impoverished the
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world
would look without its colors, which enrich human life.

However
,
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some
minimalists say that the
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world
would remain the same, if it lost its colorfulness. They justify their opinion with the following arguments.
Firstly
,
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many
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people
with impaired vision
still
enjoy the
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world
.
For example
, the blind are
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used
to ignoring the absence of vision by compensating it with enhanced hearing ability,
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so
other
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people
also
are capable to adjust to the
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colorless
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world
.
Secondly
,
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people
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in the
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close to
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one.
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,
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colorful television became available, viewers
still
enjoyed TV programs in black and white,
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the
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,
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it cannot replace an interesting plot.
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,
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can
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in a
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world
, if they
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stop
focusing
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on pigments.

In conclusion
,
even though
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some
followers of minimalism claim that
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would not
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poorer, once the diversity of
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disappeared in it, I
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that the
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both dull and tasteless for the above mentioned
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reasons
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The world would be a much poorer place without color. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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