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The world would be a much poorer place without colour. To what extent would you agree or disagree? v.1

The world would be a much poorer place without colour. v. 1
Colour is an indispensable part of our life and without it, life would seem meaningless and boring. Hence, I strongly agree with the given notion that colour is essential to make a place richer. First of all, colour is not a man-made invention. It has naturally been a part of out lives since time immemorial. Moreover, it allows us to distinguish things based on different sensations from our eyes. For instance, leaves are brown in colour when they are dried and green in colour when they are alive. Without colour, differentiating these would not be possible, therefore, life would become dull. Furthermore, colour aids in making bold statements, that is why red is used as a sign for danger and green is used for showing something positive. To make the world a safer place, it is paramount that colours are used. Secondly, colour has always been a vital subject for artists. Eminent artists like Van Gogh or Picasso focused on the use of colour to describe their feelings and surroundings. Major information about wars in the early centuries were decoded with the use of these colourful paintings, such as people used the concept of camouflage to hide from their enemies. So, in a way, colour provides insight into our history and cultural disparity. Lastly, having colour in our surroundings also has some health benefits. For example, white has always been compared with peacefulness and it is a fact that white colour emits a feeling of serenity in a person. It is for this reason that hospitals are white in colour because it helps patients to heal. In conclusion, a life without colour seems bland and mundane. To make the world a lively and fascinating place, having colour is salient.
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Colour
is an indispensable part of our
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life
and without it,
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life
would seem meaningless and boring.
Hence
, I
strongly
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agree
with the
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given
notion that
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colour
is essential to
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make
a place richer.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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colour
is not a
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man
-made invention. It has
naturally
been a part of out
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lives
since time immemorial.
Moreover
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
us to distinguish things based on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
sensations from our eyes.
For instance
,
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leaves
are
A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
brown in colour
when they
are dried
and
A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
green in colour
when they are alive. Without
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colour
, differentiating these would not be possible,
therefore
,
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life
would become dull.
Furthermore
,
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colour
aids in making bold statements,
that is
why red is
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used
as a
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sign
for
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danger
and green is
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used
for showing something
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positive
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the world a safer place, it is paramount that
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colours
are
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used
.

Secondly
,
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colour
has always been a vital subject for artists. Eminent artists like Van Gogh or Picasso focused on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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colour
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
describe
their feelings and surroundings. Major information about wars in the early centuries
were decoded
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of these
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colourful
paintings, such as
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people
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used
the concept of camouflage to
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hide
from their enemies.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, in a way,
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colour
provides insight into our history and cultural disparity.

Lastly
, having
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colour
in our surroundings
also
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
health benefits.
For example
, white has always
been compared
with peacefulness and it is a fact that white
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
emits a feeling of serenity in a person. It is
for this reason
that hospitals are
A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
white in colour
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
patients to heal.

In conclusion
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
without
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
seems bland and mundane. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the world a lively and fascinating place, having
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colour
is salient.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The world would be a much poorer place without colour. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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