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The trend of online shopping is increasing significantly What effect does it have on the environment and society in general v.2

The trend of online shopping is increasing significantly What effect does it have on the environment and society in general v. 2
Shopping has become an indispensable part of everyone' s life. Presently, people have materialistic attitudes and therefore the trend of online shopping is gaining prevalence in the entire globe. Here, I would like to account for effects of this happening on the environment and society. There are multifarious negative outcomes of e-shopping on the community. First and foremost, the majority of people have become extravagant on account of online shopping. To demonstrate, nowadays, masses have tendency to visit online shopping websites where they get allured towards astonishing products that are shown in the gorgeous packaging. Besides this, shopping websites influence the buying behaviour of customers by offering heavy discounts, special offers such as buy one, get one free. As a result, people get encouraged towards unnecessary shopping and they are supposed to become spendthrift these days. Further emphasizing on my point of view, buying things in abundance is leading to excessive consumerism which further leads to the problem of rubbish. At present, people buy more and more new things that are packed into the wrappers and plastic boxes. Moreover, old consumer durables are being replaced by the new stuff. Ultimately, such wrappers, plastic material and old goods are thrown into landfill sites that are already flooded with trash. Consequently, rubbish problem has become the serious concern in modern societies. Adding to it, a considerable rise in the rubbish production degrades the quality of environment. To be specific, non biodegradable things do not decay easily at the landfill sites and keep releasing perilous gases in our surroundings. Needless to say, purity and freshness of environment is declining at an alarming rate. To recapitulate, shopping is considered the need of an hour. Taking the negative outcomes of a remarkable rise in the online shopping, it is prime duty of individuals and government to take proactive measures to ' nip this evil in the bud' .
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has
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become
an indispensable part of
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Presently
,
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people
have materialistic attitudes and
therefore
the trend of
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online
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shopping
is gaining prevalence in the entire globe. Here, I would like to account for effects of this happening on the environment and society.

There are multifarious
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negative
outcomes of e-shopping on the community.
First
and foremost, the majority of
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people
have
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become
extravagant on account of
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online
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shopping
. To demonstrate, nowadays, masses have tendency to visit
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online
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shopping
websites where they
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get
allured towards astonishing products that
are shown
in the gorgeous packaging.
Besides
this,
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shopping
websites influence the buying
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behaviour
of customers by offering heavy discounts, special offers such as
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buy
one,
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get
one free.
As a result
,
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people
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get
encouraged towards unnecessary
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shopping and
they
are supposed
to
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become
spendthrift these days.

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Further
emphasizing on my point of view, buying things in abundance is leading to excessive consumerism which
further
leads to the problem of rubbish. At present,
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people
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buy
more and more new things that
are packed
into the wrappers and plastic boxes.
Moreover
,
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old
consumer durables are
being replaced
by the new stuff.
Ultimately
, such wrappers, plastic material and
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old
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goods
are thrown
into landfill sites that are already flooded with trash.
Consequently
, rubbish problem has
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become
the serious concern in modern societies.

Adding to it, a considerable rise in the rubbish production degrades the quality of environment. To be specific,
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non biodegradable
things do not decay
easily
at the landfill sites and
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keep
releasing perilous gases in our surroundings. Needless to say, purity and freshness of environment is declining at an alarming rate.

To recapitulate,
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shopping
is considered
the need of an hour. Taking the
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negative
outcomes of a remarkable rise in the
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online
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shopping
, it is prime duty of individuals and
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government
to take proactive measures to ' nip this evil in the
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9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The trend of online shopping is increasing significantly What effect does it have on the environment and society in general v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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