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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution. You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task v.1

The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 1
The world's population is on prodigious rise, which is a worldwide problem, is creating difficulties for not only, poor and underdeveloped nations but also, developed and developing countries. In my opinion, overpopulation is responsible for a significant number of issues all around the globe such as starvation, pollution. Firstly, it has been noticed that the rate at which population is growing is on rise over last few decades which has exacerbated the situation. Due to continuous rise in population, countries around the world have been in the spot of bother as it has been one of the detrimental factors to satisfy the basic needs of people. The continuous increase in population is creating difficulties which are tough to handle. For instance, natural resources are being consumed at excessively high rate, which also results in excessive pollution. Huge population means soaring demand of food and it has become a major worry for the nations to meet increasing demand which has resulted in rise in deaths around the world due to starvation. Finally, to deal with the surge in population, extreme steps have to be implemented by respective nations. For instance, in last decade China implemented a rule that a family cannot have more than one child. This step had positive outcome as China was able to slow down the rate of increase enormously. Various other steps such as reward programmes in the form of free education for one child, can be launched so that parents are encouraged to have not more than one child. To conclude, overpopulation is a gigantic problem around the world and it has to be controlled substantially else more people will die of starvation in poor countries and live in affluent countries will also worsen.
The world's
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population
is on prodigious
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rise
, which is a worldwide problem, is creating difficulties for not
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only
, poor and underdeveloped nations
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but
also
, developed and developing
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countries
. In my opinion, overpopulation is responsible for a significant number of issues all
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around
the globe such as starvation, pollution.

Firstly
, it has
been noticed
that the rate at which
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population
is growing is on
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rise
over last few decades which has exacerbated the situation. Due to continuous
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rise
in
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population
,
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countries
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around
the world have been in the spot of bother as it has been one of the detrimental factors to satisfy the basic needs of
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people
.

The continuous increase in
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population
is creating difficulties which are tough to handle.
For instance
, natural resources are
being consumed
at
excessively
high rate, which
also
results in excessive pollution. Huge
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population
means soaring demand of food and it has become a major worry for the nations to
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meet
increasing demand which has resulted in
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rise
in deaths
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around
the world due to starvation.

Finally
, to deal with the surge in
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population
, extreme steps
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have to
be implemented
by respective nations.
For instance
, in last decade China implemented a
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rule
that a family cannot have more than one child. This step had
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positive
outcome as China was able to slow down the rate of increase
enormously
. Various other steps such as reward
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programmes
in the form of free education for one child, can
be launched
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so
that parents
are encouraged
to have not more than one child.

To conclude
, overpopulation is a gigantic problem
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around
the world and it
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has to
be controlled
substantially
else more
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people
will
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die
of starvation in poor
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countries
and
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live
in affluent
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countries
will
also
worsen.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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