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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, which is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developed nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at le v.1

The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, which is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developed nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at le v. 1
Scientific research plays a very important role in the progress of a nation. It is argued that research should be controlled and funded by the government, and not private organisations or institutions. This essay agrees with the argument that the authorities should carry out various experiments works in different fields and will outline the reasons why bureaucrats should be responsible for such projects. There are several reasons to support my viewpoint. Firstly, the government is capable of providing financial assistance to various research projects. Moreover, if the project fails to achieve its objectives, the government has the resources to cope up with the losses incurred. Secondly, the main motive of the government in conducting research is public welfare. Thirdly, when government funds research activities, there is utmost security. They do not disclose any information which could hamper national security. That is why research and development in the field of military is carried out by the government. When private organisations conduct research, their chief concern is protecting their interests. This explains why the research conducted by coffee companies or gum companies only highlights the benefits of their products. This is not the case when the government funds research. In this case, the final verdict is more likely to be unbiased. To conclude, after analysing the various aspects of the argument, it is not hard to see that the government funding of experiments is in the interests of the public. Private organizations, on the other hand, may have their own vexed interests to protect.
Scientific
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plays a
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very
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important
role in the progress of a nation. It
is argued
that
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should
be controlled
and funded by the
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government
, and not private
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organisations
or institutions. This essay
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agrees
with the argument that the authorities should carry out various experiments works in
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different
fields and will outline the reasons why bureaucrats should be responsible for such projects.

There are several reasons to support my viewpoint.
Firstly
, the
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government
is capable of providing financial assistance to various
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research
projects.
Moreover
, if the project fails to achieve its objectives, the
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government
has the resources to cope up with the losses incurred.
Secondly
, the main motive of the
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government
in conducting
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research
is public welfare.
Thirdly
, when
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government
funds
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research
activities, there is utmost security. They do not disclose any information which could hamper national security.
That is
why
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research
and development in the field of military
is carried
out by the
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government
.

When private
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organisations
conduct
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research
, their chief concern is protecting their interests. This
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explains
why the
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research
conducted by coffee
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companies
or gum
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companies
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only
highlights the benefits of their products. This is not the case when the
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government
funds
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research
.
In this case
, the final verdict is more likely to
be unbiased
.

To conclude
, after
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analysing
the various aspects of the argument, it is not
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hard
to
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see
that the
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government
funding of experiments is in the interests of the public. Private
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organizations
,
on the other hand
, may have their
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own
vexed interests to protect.
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IELTS essay The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, which is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developed nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at le v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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