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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.15

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 15
It's generally considered that teaching small kids to become good citizens is an unwritten duty of parents. But others claim that schools, where there are properly trained teachers and sufficient learning materials, are the best places for children to learn to become future model citizens of every societies. In this essay, I'm going to look at both sides of the coin and give my own opinion at the end. In the defense of the people who think that parents should be the one to teach their kids manners and behaviours, it's been pointed out that it's an unwritten duty for the parents to do so because they are the natural guardians of their sons and daughters as well as they are the people who spend the most time with them. It's certainly agreeable that a father and a mother are the natural protectors of their children and therefore, in theory, should teach their kids to become good citizens so they can better protect themselves and their children when they get older. Another fact is that parents are always the people who spend the most time with their children (especially when the children are still young and dependent). It's been scientifically proven that children will copy their parent's behaviour and how the children will be in the future is greatly impacted by how their parents raise them up. For example, in a household where the parents always eat healthily, there's a higher chance the children will continue to view eating healthily as a vital option when they grow up. Regarding the opinion that school is a better place for children to learn to be good members of the society when they grow up, there are many points supporting this statement such as in schools there are teachers and equipments specialised in teaching and training for the children, or simply because school and education centers were created to be a place to study and to learn. More particularly, it's absolutely true that schools were introduced in the first place to teach young citizens of knowledge and manners. Nowadays it would be crime to prohibit a child from going to school. School is undoubtedly a very important part of our society, since it's the place to nurture and raise future generations. Schools and education centers also have specialised teachers and equipments, which are highly efficient in terms of teaching children to become good citizens. For instance, a teacher who is specialised in an education area will unquestionably teach children much better than the parents who are always occupied with their own jobs, personal issues, relationships, . . . . In conclusion, it's undeniably true that both the parents and the education system play a vital role in a child's grow up stages. In my personal opinion, I think that the 2 places are equally important and children needs to learn from both places in order to become great human beings. Kids cannot just go to school without learning from their parents or the other way around, both have to depends on one another to nurture a future member of the society.
It's
generally
considered that teaching
small
kids
to
become
good
citizens
is an unwritten duty of
parents
.
But
others claim that
schools
, where there are
properly
trained
teachers
and sufficient learning materials, are the best
places
for
children
to
learn
to
become
future
model
citizens
of every
societies
. In this essay, I'm going to look at both sides of the coin and give my
own
opinion at the
end
.

In the defense of the
people
who
think
that
parents
should be the one to
teach
their
kids
manners and
behaviours
,
it's
been pointed
out that
it's
an unwritten duty for the
parents
to do
so
because
they are the natural guardians of their sons and daughters
as well
as they are the
people
who
spend the most time with them.
It's
certainly
agreeable that a father and a mother are the natural protectors of their
children
and
therefore
, in theory, should
teach
their
kids
to
become
good
citizens
so
they can better protect themselves and their
children
when they
get
older. Another fact is that
parents
are always the
people
who
spend the most time with their
children
(
especially
when the
children
are
still
young and dependent).
It's
been
scientifically
proven that
children
will copy their parent's
behaviour
and how the
children
will be in the
future
is
greatly
impacted by how their
parents
raise them up.
For example
, in a household where the
parents
always eat
healthily
, there's a higher chance the
children
will continue to view eating
healthily
as a vital option when they grow up.

Regarding the opinion that
school
is a better
place
for
children
to
learn
to be
good
members of the
society
when they grow up, there are
many
points supporting this statement such as in
schools
there are
teachers
and equipments
specialised
in teaching and training for the
children
, or
simply
because
school
and
education
centers
were created
to be a
place
to study and to
learn
. More
particularly
,
it's
absolutely
true that
schools
were introduced
in the
first
place
to
teach
young
citizens
of knowledge and manners. Nowadays it would be crime to prohibit a child from going to
school
.
School
is
undoubtedly
a
very
important
part of our
society
, since
it's
the
place
to nurture and raise
future
generations.
Schools
and
education
centers
also
have
specialised
teachers
and equipments, which are
highly
efficient in terms of teaching
children
to
become
good
citizens
.
For instance
, a
teacher
who
is
specialised
in an
education
area will
unquestionably
teach
children
much better than the
parents
who
are always occupied with their
own
jobs, personal issues, relationships
, .
.
.
.


In conclusion
,
it's
undeniably
true that both the
parents
and the
education
system play a vital role in a child's grow up stages. In my personal opinion, I
think
that the 2
places
are
equally
important
and
children
needs to
learn
from both
places
in order to
become
great human beings.
Kids
cannot
just
go to
school
without learning from their
parents
or the other way around, both
have to
depends
on one another to nurture a
future
member of the
society
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
93Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 15

Essay
  American English
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518 words
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