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The use of social networking has increased dramatically these days. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social networking and give your own opinion. v.1

The use of social networking has increased dramatically these days. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social networking and give your own opinion. v. 1
Some people think that the growth of the economy is likely to be a key role regarding the achievement of happy values, especially in developed countries. Meanwhile, I do believe that valuable economic is merely a part of satisfaction. It becomes apparent that the more prosperous each country builds, the more democracy each citizen enjoys. Rich countries which are unlikely to appear more dangerous criminals like murder and robbery bring the safe and the higher quality life. It is no doubt that so terribly does lack of money cause that all residents concrete to earn much salaries with different methods as well as feeling nervous to carefully keep own properties. Some developed countries, especially those which are well-known as modern civilized areas, may have plenty of laughs and a long-time life. Consequently, its rich economy involves to joyful sentiment in a country in general. On the one hand, it is true that there were a dose of factors affecting to the peacefulness and happiness of individual person such as friend and family. In fact, people do earn a love from parents, which is the carefulness without strings attached. It can be seen obviously that unconditional love is like a muscle, it needs a daily workout in spite of either less or more cash all around the world. Vietnam, for instance, can be seen as developing country that the percentage of happiness is the same as happy as the proportion of richer countries. In conclusion, generally economy development sees a tool to create the enjoyment in each wealth country. However, it is evident that there was a variety of sectors to boost the peacefulness and blessedness.
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people
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think
that the growth of the economy is likely to be a key role regarding the achievement of happy values,
especially
in developed
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countries
. Meanwhile, I do believe that valuable economic is
merely
a part of satisfaction.

It becomes apparent that the more prosperous each
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country
builds, the more democracy each citizen enjoys. Rich
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countries
which are unlikely to appear more
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dangerous
criminals like murder and robbery bring the safe and the higher quality life. It is no doubt that
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so
terribly
does lack of money cause that all residents concrete to earn
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much
salaries with
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different
methods
as well
as feeling nervous to
carefully
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keep
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own
properties.
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developed
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countries
,
especially
those which are well-known as modern civilized areas, may have
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plenty
of laughs and a long-time life.
Consequently
, its rich economy involves to joyful sentiment in a
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country
in general
.

On the one hand, it is true that there were a dose of factors affecting to the peacefulness and happiness of individual person such as friend and family. In fact,
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people
do earn a
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love
from parents, which is the carefulness without strings attached. It can be
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seen
obviously
that unconditional
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love
is like a muscle, it needs a daily workout
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in spite of
either less or more cash all around the world. Vietnam,
for instance
, can be
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seen
as developing
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country
that the percentage of happiness is the same as happy as the proportion of richer countries.

In conclusion
,
generally
economy development
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sees
a tool to create the enjoyment in each wealth
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country
.
However
, it is evident that there was a variety of sectors to boost the peacefulness and blessedness.
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IELTS essay The use of social networking has increased dramatically these days. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social networking and give your own opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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