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The United Nations recently celebrated its 70th anniversary. What benefits has it brought during this time? Do you think the UN will last another 70 years? v.1

The United Nations recently celebrated its 70th anniversary. What benefits has it brought during this time? Do you think the UN will last another 70 years? v. 1
The United Nations has been established since the end of the Second World War to provide a peaceful way to resolve national conflicts. This essay will first suggest that peacekeeping and emergency food and health aid are the primary roles, and it then predicts that the light might still shed on this organization in the future. When it comes to the achievements of the United Nations, it is difficult to imagine a world without the United Nations because it plays a leading role in everything from conflict resolution to emergency food aid and global public health. Many people trust the United Nations because it is a democratic organization that reflects the interests of all its member states and not just one particular country. In this way, the United Nations has restricted the influence of powerful countries like the USA, Russia, and China; while, it gives smaller nations a say in global affairs. It has also been done under the United Nations when seeking financial contributions from wealthier member states and redistributing it as economic aid or rapid assistance to parts of the world that need it most. As for the future of the United Nations, the world is an extremely different place from how it looked in 1945, which has led some people to request the need for a powerful organization like the United Nations. In particular, there are some proponents of free trade who argue that competition and not cooperation between nations is the fastest way to pursue economic development. Despite this argument, I believe that the more nations become interdependent, the more they will require a global forum to resolve their differences. Although other global associations can play an equal role, such as the World Bank and the International Criminal Court, none has the power as the United Nations. For these reasons, the United Nations has been sure to exist for decades to come and possibly for another 70 years. In conclusion, the UN remains the most viable organization for dealing with the world’s problems, and this is unlikely to change very soon.
The
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has
been established
since the
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end
of the Second
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World
War to provide a peaceful way to resolve national conflicts. This essay will
first
suggest that peacekeeping and emergency food and health aid are the primary roles, and it then predicts that the light might
still
shed on this
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organization
in the future.

When it
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comes
to the achievements of the
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United
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Nations
, it is difficult to imagine a
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world
without the
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United
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Nations
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because
it plays a leading role in everything from conflict resolution to emergency food aid and
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global
public health.
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Many
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people
trust the
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United
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Nations
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because
it is a democratic
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organization
that reflects the interests of all its member states and not
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just
one particular country. In this way, the
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United
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Nations
has restricted the influence of powerful countries like the USA, Russia, and China; while, it gives smaller
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nations
a say in
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global
affairs. It has
also
been done
under the
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United
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Nations
when seeking financial contributions from wealthier member states and redistributing it as economic aid or rapid assistance to parts of the
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world
that need it most.

As for the future of the
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United
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Nations
, the
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world
is an
extremely
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different
place from how it looked in 1945, which has led
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some
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people
to request the need for a powerful
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organization
like the
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United
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Nations
.
In particular
, there are
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some
proponents of free trade who argue that competition and not cooperation between
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nations
is the fastest way to pursue economic development. Despite this argument, I believe that the more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
become interdependent, the more they will require a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
forum to resolve their differences. Although other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
associations can play an equal role, such as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
World
Bank and the International Criminal Court, none has the power as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
United
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Nations
. For these reasons, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
United
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Nations
has been sure to exist for decades to
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come
and
possibly
for another 70 years.

In conclusion
, the UN remains the most viable
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organization
for dealing with the
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world’s
problems, and this is unlikely to
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change
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very
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soon
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The United Nations recently celebrated its 70th anniversary. What benefits has it brought during this time? Do you think the UN will last another 70 years? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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