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nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online than face to face. is this a positive or negative development. v.1

nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online than face to face. is this a positive or negative development. v. 1
Internet technology has become more popular these days. In this contemporary world, social media is being used by higher number of people instead of direct interaction. Although it has ample number of pros, it gets several cons throughout new progress. To commence with, regarding reasons, first is that connecting with online apps saves time and provides safety too. It means people have no time for meeting their relatives during hectic life as well as they feel secure in this crime world for travelling far away. Secondly, accessibility all time without any obstacle. People can get touched with loved ones anywhere across the globe easily by not having much trouble. To illustrate, some researchers claim that a higher percentage of online service users have been rising dramatically. So communication by using internet sources has got positive image. On the flip side, one coin has two sides, socialising by online also put negative effect on the masses. It is provided that without an intermediary conversation confidence level get altered and leads to shyness and fear. Furthermore, obesity is the foremost cause amongst youths due to the constant sitting on the computers in the absence of physical exercise. For instance, students of London university found out that 90% of people are getting fat due to less physically active. Wrapping up, getting in touch with others in person does play an imperative role rather than contact with online social routes.
Internet technology has become more popular these days. In this contemporary world, social media is being
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used
by higher number of
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people
instead
of direct interaction. Although it has ample number of pros, it
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gets
several cons throughout new progress.

To commence with, regarding reasons,
first
is that connecting with
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online
apps saves time and provides safety too. It means
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people
have no time for meeting their relatives during hectic life
as well
as they feel secure in this crime world for travelling far away.
Secondly
, accessibility all time without any obstacle.
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People
can
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get
touched with
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loved
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ones
anywhere across the globe
easily
by not having much trouble. To illustrate,
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some
researchers claim that a higher percentage of
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online
service users have been rising
dramatically
.
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So
communication by using internet sources has
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got
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positive
image.

On the flip side, one coin has two sides,
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socialising
by
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online
also
put
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negative
effect on the masses. It
is provided
that without an intermediary conversation confidence level
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
altered and leads to shyness and fear.
Furthermore
, obesity is the foremost cause amongst youths due to the constant sitting on the computers in the absence of physical exercise.
For instance
, students of London university found out that 90% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
due to less
physically
active.

Wrapping up, getting in touch with others in person does play an imperative role
rather
than contact with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
social routes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online than face to face. is this a positive or negative development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
236 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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