Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Education is recognized as vital to the future of any society in today's world. Governments throughout the world should make education compulsory for all children between the ages of 5 and 15. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this stateme v.1

Education is recognized as vital to the future of any society in today's world. Governments throughout the world should make education compulsory for all children between the ages of 5 and 15. with this stateme v. 1
In the current world, education is considered as a prominent key which acts as the backbone of the many nations across the globe, so, governments state that it ought to be compulsory in between 5 and 15 years of age children. I completely agree with this notion because this phenomenon makes children good future citizens of the nation, and it leads a good career prospect in later life. To begin with, it is often said that the bureaucracy of the countries should make compulsory education in order to make the children better nationals by inculcating moral teaching regarding society in primary schools. For instance, the Indian government provides numerous primary and secondary education schools in the entire nation, even at countryside to ensure every child should obtain standard education because the ages of 5 and 15 years are crucial to building up each and everything in subjects; hence, preschoolers and secondary schoolers are taught sociology as the significant subject along with maths and language subjects. Therefore, children can become good citizens of the nation. Moreover, compulsory education in the ages of 5 and 15 might provide lucrative career prospects in later life. To elaborate, primary to secondary education is the only one which acts as the foundation stone for higher studies and to achieve a better life. Thus, many nations of the government make compulsory education for teenagers. For example, Japanese schools even assist hostel accommodations its nationals to avoid any inconvenience for their education upto secondary level as their recognised education is mandatory. Hence, students are obtaining standard education at their primary and secondary levels in many communities which aid a better life once they turn into adults. In conclusion, indeed, compulsory education makes children good citizens and also leads to better employability; hence, governments must make compulsory education for their teenagers.
In the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
world,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is considered
as a prominent key which acts as the backbone of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
across the globe,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
state that it ought to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
compulsory
in between 5 and 15 years of age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this notion
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
this phenomenon
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
future citizens of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
, and it leads a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
career prospect in later life.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
said that the bureaucracy of the countries should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
compulsory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
in order to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
nationals by inculcating moral teaching regarding society in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
primary
schools.
For instance
, the Indian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
provides numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
primary
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
secondary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
schools in the entire
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
, even at countryside to ensure every child should obtain standard
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the ages of 5 and 15 years are crucial to building up each and everything in subjects;
hence
, preschoolers and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
secondary
schoolers
are taught
sociology as the significant subject along with
Possible spelling mistake. 'maths' is British English.
maths
and language subjects.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can become
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
citizens of the nation.

Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
compulsory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
in the ages of 5 and 15 might provide lucrative career prospects in later life. To elaborate,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
primary
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
secondary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one which acts as the foundation stone for higher studies and to achieve a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
life.
Thus
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
compulsory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
.
For example
, Japanese schools even assist hostel accommodations its nationals to avoid any inconvenience for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
Possible spelling mistake found.
upto
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
secondary
level as their
Possible spelling mistake. 'recognised' is British English.
recognised
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is mandatory.
Hence
, students are obtaining standard
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
at their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
primary
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
secondary
levels in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
communities which aid a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
life once they turn into adults.

In conclusion
,
indeed
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
compulsory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
citizens and
also
leads to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
employability;
hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
compulsory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Education is recognized as vital to the future of any society in today's world. Governments throughout the world should make education compulsory for all children between the ages of 5 and 15. with this stateme v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts