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The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years, and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. v.1

The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years, and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. v. 1
Every country has three levels of status of living, through which its economic growth is analysed. One is high class, the other as middle class and the last, the poor. It's a known fact that except the first category, the latter two need help from the government or people, in order to meet their minimum requirements. While people of middle class look for financial aids, they expect medical support, as well. Well, in this context, aid does not mean only financially, but, in fact, includes other exigencies like food, clothing, a tiny shelter, protection from drowning in rains and so on. Many parts of the World are focus-centric on the supply of such necessities in times of natural calamities like rain, lack of drinking water, etc. , . An exemplar of this is India, where in, when Kerela got suddenly flooded in 2018, it's absurd to the situation of the state. Almost everything is smashed due to continuous heavy rains for months together. Drastic changes have come as a cause of this, besides, many lives lost, people got killed, vehicles scattered, houses collapsed and many more negative impacts were seen. Continuing, people lost their identities and starved for prey and shelter. In such scenario not only the Kerala government took many huge steps to rescue them in a safe place, but also, vital things were supplied by the Non-Government Organisations (NGOs). There is a remarkable record of helping hands stretched to refrain the needy, even from the bottom of the lanes till the Nation. Each and every individual took the responsibility in a very high impressive subtlety. Similar is the case when Japan, China, some parts of India and Indonesia were caught with Tsunami which perished the natural resources of the places and led to fatalities, indeed, they received an awesome global support in rescue and recovery. To summarize, in my opinion, every individual has to take up such tasks, with utmost respect, come forward share the ideas or support to the government, so that, proper utilization can be done. Also, I strongly insist on multiple provisions as aforesaid, apart from monetary terms, as most of the conditions may not allow purchasing or movements, at times.
Every country has three levels of status of living, through which its economic growth is
analysed
. One is high
class
, the other as middle
class
and the last, the poor. It's a known fact that except the
first
category, the latter two need
help
from the
government
or
people
, in order to
meet
their minimum requirements. While
people
of middle
class
look for financial aids, they
expect
medical support,
as well
.

Well, in this context, aid does not mean
only
financially
,
but
, in fact, includes other exigencies like food, clothing, a tiny shelter, protection from drowning in rains and
so
on.
Many
parts of the World are focus-centric on the supply of such necessities in times of natural calamities like rain, lack of drinking water, etc.
, .
An exemplar of this is India, where in, when
Kerela
got
suddenly
flooded in 2018, it's absurd to the situation of the state. Almost everything
is smashed
due to continuous heavy rains for months together. Drastic
changes
have
come
as a cause of this,
besides
,
many
lives
lost,
people
got
killed, vehicles scattered,
houses
collapsed and
many
more
negative
impacts were
seen
.

Continuing,
people
lost their identities and starved for prey and shelter. In such scenario not
only
the Kerala
government
took
many
huge steps to rescue them in a safe place,
but
also
, vital things
were supplied
by the Non-
Government
Organisations
(NGOs). There is a remarkable record of helping hands stretched to refrain the needy, even from the bottom of the lanes till the Nation. Each and every individual took the responsibility in a
very
high impressive subtlety. Similar is the case when Japan, China,
some
parts of India and Indonesia
were caught
with Tsunami which perished the natural resources of the places and led to fatalities,
indeed
, they received an awesome global support in rescue and recovery.

To summarize
, in my opinion, every individual
has to
take up such tasks, with utmost respect,
come
forward share the
ideas
or support to the
government
,
so
that, proper utilization can
be done
.
Also
, I
strongly
insist on multiple provisions as aforesaid, apart from monetary terms, as most of the conditions may not
allow
purchasing or movements, at times.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years, and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
7.5
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