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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and Clean Energy. The benefits of nuclear energy far outweigh the advantages to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and Clean Energy. The benefits of nuclear energy far outweigh the advantages v. 6
The world gets peace because of nuclear weapons development. The Nuclear power station gives us environmental friendly energy. There are a number of advantages compared to disadvantages. I think nuclear power has more negative result on society than positive. To support my opinion, I will discuss both pros and cons of nuclear power. Firstly, nowadays people produces most of energy from fossil fuels by burning non renewable resources. We contribute in to the destruction of our planet. Moreover, this trend also increases a global warming. Similarly, to manage nuclear power plant is also a challenge because little wrong functioning will become the reason of great disaster. For example, in 2010 Tsunami stuck in the power plant (in japan) and because of this there was a huge explosion that scene of casualties was a very horrible. Furthermore, the countries having superpowers of nuclear are threatening underdeveloped countries by using nuclear weapons and it could cut the relation between two neighbouring countries. If we talk about the merits of nuclear power than one thing will come in our mind that is less expensive and clean energy for the environment. Due to the rapid use of fossil fuels, we could face the problems in the future, but if humans use nuclear power as an alternative source of energy we can overcome the future problem. Adding to this, some countries could not have coal and crude oil they would use a nuclear to generate the power for the industries. In conclusion, with no doubt I can say that nuclear power has more demerits in comparison with its benefits. It affects the natural system of the universe and spoil the vital relationship between mankind and ecological balance.
The world
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gets
peace
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because
of nuclear weapons development. The Nuclear
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power
station gives us environmental friendly
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energy
. There are a number of advantages compared to disadvantages. I
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think
nuclear
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power
has more
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negative
result on society than
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positive
. To support my opinion, I will discuss both pros and cons of nuclear power.

Firstly
, nowadays
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people
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produces
most of
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energy
from fossil fuels by burning
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non renewable
resources. We contribute in to the destruction of our planet.
Moreover
, this trend
also
increases a global warming.
Similarly
, to manage nuclear
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power
plant is
also
a challenge
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because
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little
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wrong
functioning will become the reason of great disaster.
For example
, in 2010 Tsunami stuck in the
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power
plant (in japan) and
because of this
there was a huge explosion that scene of casualties was a
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very
horrible.
Furthermore
, the countries having superpowers of nuclear are threatening underdeveloped countries by using nuclear weapons and it could
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cut
the relation between two
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neighbouring
countries.

If we talk about the merits of nuclear
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power
than one thing will
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come
in our mind
that is
less expensive and clean
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energy
for the environment. Due to the rapid
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use
of fossil fuels, we could face the problems in the future,
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but
if humans
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use
nuclear
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power
as an alternative source of
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energy
we can overcome the future problem. Adding to this,
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some
countries could not have coal and crude oil they would
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use
a nuclear to generate the
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power
for the industries.

In conclusion
, with no doubt I can say that nuclear
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power
has more demerits
in comparison
with its benefits. It affects the natural system of the universe and spoil the vital relationship between mankind and ecological balance.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and Clean Energy. The benefits of nuclear energy far outweigh the advantages v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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