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Threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the dis advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the dis advantages. v. 1
The menace of nuclear arsenals maintains peace around the world. Some would argue that nuclear energy is cost effective and clean, and it has more advantages than disadvantages. This essay completely disagrees with this statement because despite being efficient, it always generates harmful waste products after energy production, and the use of these stockpiles could be catastrophic to the planet. It is true that nuclear power is cheap, but it is not clean because it spreads toxic by-products into the environment. That is to say that once the energy is produced from nuclear power, it often leaves dangerous after-products that emits radiation into the atmosphere, and it affects adversely on humans as well as all the living organisms. As a result, handling and disposal of these waste products are dangerous, and it bothers all the nations. For example, in 2008, an accident reported in one of the nuclear power plants in France contaminated almost 100 workers in the plants with hazardous radiation which was almost life threatening to them. Another reason to prove nuclear technology is dangerous is that the use of these weapons could be devastating, and the entire plant would be destroyed. This is because nuclear weapons are extremely powerful as it emits strong radiation, and are able to cause harm to all living things, even using smaller amounts. If any nation uses this arsenal, it is not only distrust the nation against which they used it, but also affects the neighbouring nations too. For instance, a recent documentary on the BBC showed that almost 92% of nuclear weapon stockpiles are owned by the USA and the USSR, and a single piece from this stock could be a havoc to the planet. In conclusion, although nuclear weapons keeps world peace and provides cheap energy, I believe it has more demerits than merits because it releases toxic waste products into the environment, and even a single use of nuclear weapon could be apocalyptical for the entire universe.
The menace of nuclear arsenals maintains peace around the world.
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Some
would argue that nuclear
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energy
is cost
effective and clean, and it has more advantages than disadvantages. This essay completely disagrees with this statement
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because
despite being efficient, it always generates harmful waste products after
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energy
production, and the
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use
of these stockpiles could be catastrophic to the planet.

It is true that nuclear power is
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cheap
,
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but
it is not clean
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because
it spreads toxic by-products into the environment.
That is
to say that once the
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energy
is produced
from nuclear power, it
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often
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leaves
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dangerous
after-products that emits radiation into the atmosphere, and it affects
adversely
on humans
as well
as all the living organisms.
As a result
, handling and disposal of these waste products are
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dangerous
, and it bothers all the
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nations
.
For example
, in 2008, an accident reported in one of the nuclear power plants in France contaminated almost 100 workers in the plants with hazardous radiation which was almost life threatening to them.

Another reason to prove nuclear technology is
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dangerous
is that the
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use
of these
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weapons
could be devastating, and the entire plant would be
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destroyed
. This is
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because
nuclear
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weapons
are
extremely
powerful as it emits strong radiation, and are able to cause harm to all living things, even using smaller amounts. If any
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nation
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uses
this arsenal, it is not
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only
distrust the
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nation
against which they
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used
it,
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but
also
affects the
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neighbouring
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nations
too.
For instance
, a recent documentary on the BBC
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showed
that almost 92% of nuclear
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weapon
stockpiles are
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owned
by the USA and the USSR, and a single piece from this stock could be a havoc to the planet.

In conclusion
, although nuclear
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weapons
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keeps
world peace and provides
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cheap
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energy
, I believe it has more demerits than merits
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because
it releases toxic waste products into the environment, and even a single
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use
of nuclear
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weapon
could be
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apocalyptical
for the entire universe.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the dis advantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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