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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 3
Advocates claim that nuclear energy derived from uranium can be weaponized to keep this chaotic world in harmony, whilst some also support to use it as an energy source due to the low price and pollutant-free characteristics. I totally agree that the advantages of advancement with nuclear power far outweigh its negative costs, the reason is that the technology is as well very cost-effective and economical despite the harmful effects it may impose in times of accidents. The production of nuclear power is known to be very cost-effective. A little piece of uranium can synthesise hundreds of thousands of energy at a time, comparing to the others. In other words, merchants will only have to purchase much less fuel at a more affordable price to generate the same amount of energy. This implies that the generation of nuclear energy is very economical and thus nuclear technology will be much more accessible to various groups in society. As well as this, the fact that only a little uranium is used each time also suggests how abundant the energy source will be for generations, and that we will no longer have to look for alternatives shortly. Hence it shows that nuclear technology is rather sustainable for different usage. Nonetheless, those who cast doubts on nuclear technology criticise the severe damage nuclear technology could lead to. In cases of emergencies, radioactive substances leaked out from the nuclear plant accidentally can be significantly detrimental to living organisms including human. By ways of illustration, the harmful substances given out during the well-known Fukushima nuclear disaster in 2011 caused the evacuation of citizens, and even after eight years, this once beautiful and dazzling city is yet to be rebuilt and redeveloped. In conclusion, there is a wide spectrum of opinions on nuclear technology, supporters proclaim that nuclear technology can be widely used in times of war, as an environmental-friendly energy source, and as a cost-effective option for all. Whilst sceptics argue that nuclear technology is too risky to utilise and may impose terrible consequences in unpredictable incidents. On balance, however, I believe the advantages of it has outweighed the negative impacts. Given this situation, it would be best to follow all the rules and instructions carefully and conscientiously when utilising this powerful energy resource.
Advocates claim that nuclear
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energy
derived from uranium can
be weaponized
to
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keep
this chaotic world in harmony, whilst
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some
also
support to
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use
it as an
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energy
source due to the low price and pollutant-free characteristics. I
totally
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agree
that the advantages of advancement with nuclear power far outweigh its
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negative
costs, the reason is that the
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technology
is
as well
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very
cost-effective and economical despite the harmful effects it may impose in
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times
of accidents.

The production of nuclear power
is known
to be
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very
cost-effective. A
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little
piece of uranium can
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synthesise
hundreds of thousands of
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energy
at a
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time
, comparing to the others.
In other words
, merchants will
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only
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have to
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purchase
much less fuel at a more affordable price to generate the same amount of
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energy
.
This implies that
the generation of nuclear
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energy
is
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very
economical and
thus
nuclear
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technology
will be much more accessible to various groups in society.
As well
as this, the fact that
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only
a
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little
uranium is
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used
each
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time
also
suggests how abundant the
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energy
source will be for generations, and that we will no longer
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have to
look for alternatives shortly.
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Hence
it
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shows
that nuclear
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technology
is
rather
sustainable for
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different
usage.

Nonetheless, those who cast doubts on nuclear
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technology
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criticise
the severe damage nuclear
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technology
could lead to. In cases of emergencies, radioactive substances leaked out from the nuclear plant
accidentally
can be
significantly
detrimental to living organisms including human. By ways of illustration, the harmful substances
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given
out during the well-known Fukushima nuclear disaster in 2011 caused the evacuation of citizens, and even after eight years, this once
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beautiful
and dazzling city is
yet
to be rebuilt and redeveloped.

In conclusion
, there is a wide spectrum of opinions on nuclear
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technology
, supporters proclaim that nuclear
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technology
can be
widely
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used
in
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times
of war, as an environmental-friendly
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energy
source, and as a cost-effective option for all. Whilst
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sceptics
argue that nuclear
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technology
is too risky to
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utilise
and may impose terrible consequences in unpredictable incidents. On balance,
however
, I believe the advantages of it has outweighed the
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negative
impacts.
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Given
this situation, it would be best to follow all the
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rules
and instructions
carefully
and
conscientiously
when
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utilising
this powerful
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energy
resource.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
378 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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