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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, and the protection is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, and the protection is a waste of resources. v. 2
It is argued that in the 21st century wild species such as lion, tiger, elephant, and monkey don not have any place and keeping them is a waste of resources such as money, land and time. This essay totally disagrees with this statement because killing naturals habitats will create a discrepancy on the environmental chain and they can be used for the benefits of humans. Nature has its own chain and killing its animal might destroy the balance of it. To keep our environment in a good living condition we need to have wild animals in their places such as forest. Destroying forest to make more land will create an imbalance in the environment and all these animals will come to our living places. Moreover, hunting them to show bravery will create a future shortage of this species and our next generation may see them on photos or in the museum. For example, we could take Dianosour, we can only see its fossil in the museum, photos or in a movie. Humans and wild animal can live together as they have been living from the beginning of the human era. Another reason why this essay disagrees with this statement is that humans have been using wild animals for their advantages. Whenever human needs to do some research, they take wild species to test. For instance, we could take the monkey Lyca who was the first life to send in the space when human were not sure about the outer space environment. Furthermore, researchers are using monkeys, Rabbits to achieve a serum for HIV and cancer. It is essential to have wild creatures for human’s benefits. In conclusion, it is not a waste of resources to protect wild animals in the modern 21st century. It brings the balance in nature and it is beneficial for human.
It
is argued
that in the 21st century wild species such as lion, tiger, elephant, and monkey
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don not
have any place and keeping them is a waste of resources such as money, land and time. This essay
totally
disagrees with this statement
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because
killing naturals habitats will create a discrepancy on the environmental
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chain and
they can be
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used
for the benefits of humans.

Nature has its
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own
chain and killing its
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animal
might
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destroy
the balance of it. To
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keep
our environment in a
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good
living condition we need to have wild
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animals
in their places such as forest. Destroying forest to
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make
more land will create an imbalance in the environment and all these
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animals
will
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come
to our living places.
Moreover
, hunting them to
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show
bravery will create a future shortage of this species and our
next
generation may
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see
them on photos or in the museum.
For example
, we could take
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Dianosour
, we can
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only
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see
its fossil in the museum, photos or in a movie.
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Humans
and wild
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animal
can
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live
together as they have been living from the beginning of the
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human
era.

Another reason why this essay disagrees with this statement is that
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humans
have been using wild
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animals
for their advantages. Whenever
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human
needs to do
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some
research, they take wild species to
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test
.
For instance
, we could take the monkey
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Lyca
who was the
first
life to
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send
in the space when
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human
were not sure about the outer space environment.
Furthermore
, researchers are using monkeys, Rabbits to achieve a serum for HIV and cancer. It is essential to have wild creatures for
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human’s benefits
.

In conclusion
, it is not a waste of resources to protect wild
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animals
in the modern 21st century. It brings the balance in nature and it is beneficial for
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human
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, and the protection is a waste of resources. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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